A Comparison of George Orwell's Animal Farm to Marxism and the 1917 Russian Revolution
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"You have done a great job creating a neatly formatted essay that is well-organized. Your use of paragraphs and supportive evidence makes the essay easier to read. You have started your essay off with a very simple introduction. Consider elaborating upon it by talking about why the two topics can be compared and what exactly you will be comparing. The body of the paper is quite informative but it feels like a list because of the way that you transition from one idea to the next. Consider using transitional words and phrases that will allow transitions between ideas to flow more smoothly. Since you do have so much evidence in your text, the limited number of citations is concerning. Every time that you include information that you obtained from somewhere else it is important to cite it to avoid plagiarism issues. Also, make sure that all of your citations include the appropriate information such as author's last name, year of publication, and page number if you used a direct quote. Your essay is currently lacking a conclusion. Consider including a paragraph that summarizes all of the main points you made in the essay and reiterates the essay's goal. Last, the references on the Works Cited page are not properly formatted and many are missing information. Review the style guide you are supposed to be using to be able to properly fix them. "
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