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How Certain Health Problems Affect China and the UK Differently

This essay looks at certain health problems affecting China and the UK. The student notes that issues like obesity are prevalent in Western cultures, and these issues are on the rise in China as it becomes more Westernized.
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Bob's feedback:

"It's obvious that you've done quite a bit of research into several problems that affect China and the UK. While your focus seems to be on how certain problems affect these countries differently, your conclusion doesn't seem to reinforce any differences between them. There are several ideas that are repeated unnecessarily, and some bits of information that are objectively false (e.g., your claim that a BMI of 30 means a person is 30 pounds overweight).

Work on highlighting the differences between China and the UK rather than simply noting that health problems are on the rise in both countries. It feels like you are often on the verge of describing a clear distinction without quite getting there. Make sure to have the essay proofread to address grammatical issues and awkward sentences."

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