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The story starts out describing the place that Peggy lives in Ok interesting enough that seemed sort of weird to start out the story Peggy seems to be living in an apartment of some kind where she awaits her lover Ken to pick her up She looks forward to the weekend but this week it was going to bea lot different for her She had stayed awake that night irritated by the noises outside her apartment Taking the last shower packing boiling water for coffee she sat on the steps catching the sun coming over the building It was time for her to go All that missed sleep would be made up for on the car The story seems to bea drag at the start really nothing is happening and it doesnt tell us what kind of person is Peggy Not a strong beginning to grasp the reader and the introduction seems to be lacking on descriptions and characteristics Ken arrives at Peggys house with his car all loaded of things like if they were refugees since they never told us where they were going to go and why was Peggy going with Ken This part in the story was really unclear and made the story questionable on why would Peggy do should a thing And what was the writers intension on not telling us Because next thing we know she got in a car accident This part was also unclear how did they get in a car accident There were many factors that could have happened to cause them to crash Like when they went to the liquor store Ken has a disorder or problem or what else This seems like a choose your own story book Nothing is given straight to you you just have to guess what happened in between and just go with it Peggys body is trappedunder the crashed car and the medical response team arrives and tries to save
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