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Death of a Salesman: A Slow and Confusing Classic with Mostly Effective Pathos

In this critical consideration of Death of a Salesman, the student unfavorably compares Arthur Miller's classic to other works like All My Sons. The student critiques the pacing and finds the use of memory to be unnecessarily opaque but considers Willy Loman to be a well-crafted grotesque.
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Bridget's feedback:

"This is a detailed engagement with a lot of energy, communicating your work with the text and the time spent reading, considering, and analyzing. The blend of critical and personal points is dynamic and keeps the discussion lively.

As you move forward, I recommend further work with organization and structure in terms of conveying focus and purpose. Signposting in para. 1 suggests a conversation with Aristotelean drama, but this doesn't become an explicit framework in the body of the essay, so make sure what you prepare the reader for matches up with what they get. I wonder if the comparison to other plays should come toward the end to prevent any reader expectation of an ongoing compare/contrast, though I don't consider this as confusing as the abovementioned signposting.

Elements of the presentation, including how you present the quotations (such as on page 2) should be brought into alignment with any assigned style guide. Similarly, adjust page formatting, line spacing, indents, etc., for a clean and professional presentation, and proofread to catch minor errors. I also see a number of opportunities to revise for more efficient syntax, which will enhance clarity and keep the discussion moving."

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