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"This is an enjoyable and informative read! You communicate directly with the reader, guiding them with signposting language and an engaging tone. Moving forward should address two areas. The first is transitions. Taking a look at your introduction, the sentences don't quite connect, reading instead like a list. Transitional phrases and words can help with this, as can thinking about what order to present the sentences, how they relate to one another, and if fusing certain sentences together makes sense (e.g., sentences 4-5). More evident transitions between paragraphs, as well as a more purposeful order of paragraph, will help create more cohesiveness toward the end of the essay; earlier, the transitions and order are solid, so use those earlier paragraphs as models. The paragraphs themselves show good focus, so this is a task that will focus on topic sentences, concluding sentences, and macrolevel organization. The second main task will be in proofreading, including catching typos (capitalization), some punctuation issues, and polishing up some awkward phrasing."
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(Kibin, 2024)
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Kibin. (2024). The exciting world of volcanoes. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/the-exciting-world-of-volcanoes-W7oV8U52
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("The Exciting World of Volcanoes.")
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"The Exciting World of Volcanoes." Kibin, 2024, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/the-exciting-world-of-volcanoes-W7oV8U52
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