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How Eleanor Roosevelt's Life and Work Embodied Female Leadership

This essay on the life of Eleanor Roosevelt follows her from early life to her work with the United Nations. The student explains that Roosevelt is inspirational as a role model of empathy, work ethic, and female strength.
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Bridget's feedback:

"Your opening provides a great hook, helping the reader get invested in the topic at a personal level. This captures their attention, defines the purpose, and helps your reader understand what will be emphasized thematically and emotionally beneath the biographical details. I encourage you to finish the essay with a similar personal narrative check-in that can bring the discussion full circle and reinforce the human aspect and emotional content of the essay. (The current draft ends rather abruptly on a single line, and may even be unfinished.)

The essay will benefit from tidying up on a few levels, including proofreading to catch typos and other errors, and reviewing the presentation, including block quotations. Occasional single-line quotes from Roosevelt seem to be used to structure the discussion, but it's hard to tell with the current formatting. You want your reader to know how each element on the page operates, so check your style guide for examples and rules."

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