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What My Mother Taught Me about Body Positivity

This personal essay describes the student's developing understanding of her mother's advice to never own a scale. Though first suspecting the advice was a warning against eating disorders, the student comes to realize it is a broader philosophy on choosing one's own criteria for happiness.
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This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Bridget's feedback:

"This essay has a really engaging voice that I enjoyed spending the two pages with: the discussion is full of personality, and the description of the people at the gym had me smiling. A careful proofread will help catch some issues impacting clarity while maintaining the style and energy; watch out for comma splices -- cleaning those up will really help with clarity and flow.

In terms of clarity at the macro-level, I found it hard to follow the references to the assignment ("To start off my assignment...") and thus determine the purpose as it relates to a prompt or task. How much this needs to be explained will depend on who you have determined your audience to be and what contextual information they need."

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