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Themes and Messages of Street Soldier by Joseph Marshall

In this essay on Joseph Marshall's 1996 memoir Street Soldier, the student explores how the author's personality, skills, and determination have driven his mission to help Black students in the Bay Area, where Marshall taught public school.
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Bridget's feedback:

"You are off to a great start, with a solid structure and overall organization; focused paragraphs that make good use of topic sentences, signposting, and transitions; and logical argumentation aided by specific quotations from the book. Well done!

Moving forward will entail a few detail-oriented tasks, including proofreading to catch frequent minor typos or errors. Watch out for comma splices, run-on sentences, and typos like dropped letters impacting spelling. While these don't cause major clarity issues, each of them is a bump in the road for your reader, who may become distracted. Catch and resolve these to avoid giving an impression of carelessness or lack of control (ethos).

Another task will target how you integrate the quotations into the discussion. You've done a great job using signal phrases, but also consider how the order you present the quote and the analysis can impact flow and clarity. For example, in para. 3 you present the quotation but then have to backtrack to explain. Try out different ways to smooth this out, including by giving the context first or incorporating the contextual information into the signal phrase."

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