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Kibin. (2024). Sex appeal in advertising. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/sex-appeal-in-advertising-zBfum8Tm
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"You did an excellent job finding a variety of examples to prove your point that sex appeal is rampant in advertising. However, I'm not completely clear on the purpose of your essay, and I think it could benefit from stronger organization. Based on your introduction, it seems like your goal is to point out examples of sex appeal in advertising that people may not have noticed, but you also focus quite a bit on the lies of advertisers and "weasel words." I'd consider revising your introduction to emphasize the specific point you're hoping to prove with this essay, and I'd also recommend adding a strong conclusion to reiterate this point, rather than doing just a quick wrap-up at the end of the Herbal Essences paragraph. Making smaller paragraphs will also help you focus on just one specific point in each - right now, you have a very long paragraph touching on many different topics, which makes your paper a bit more difficult to follow than it would be otherwise. Make sure to proofread your essay as well - there are a few small errors that could be cleaned up to help this be more effective!"
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(Kibin, 2024)
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Kibin. (2024). Sex appeal in advertising. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/sex-appeal-in-advertising-zBfum8Tm
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("Sex Appeal in Advertising.")
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"Sex Appeal in Advertising." Kibin, 2024, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/sex-appeal-in-advertising-zBfum8Tm
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1. "Sex Appeal in Advertising." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/sex-appeal-in-advertising-zBfum8Tm.
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