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The point of view is Eye of God but sometimes it speaks out the main characters thoughts as if it were him narrating it Passage Richard looked up A boy dressed in baggy jeans and a thick army-green sweater was pushing his way towards them He was about the same age as Richard several inches shorter but a good deal stockier He jerked his head at Bonny OK Bonny hesitated She looked back at Richard So are you coming or not Oh I suppose if you really insist -- Suit yourself said Vic No thats all right Bonny slipped her hand into Richards Were coming Altered to 1st person - Richards view I looked up to see Vic the boy who owned the squat He was dressed in baggy jeans and an army-green sweater and was pushing towards us He looked to be about my age but a few inches shorter than me He jerked his head at Bonny and said OK Bonny seemed to hesitate and looked at me and asked if I was coming or not I thought about the ups and downs weighed up the pros and cons but decided to so I replied that I would if she insists And the Vic said cockily Suit yourself Bonny replied and said No thats all right were coming and slipped her hand into mine This would make the book worse because you wouldnt see everything from reading the book as you need to sometimes to make any sense For instance at the start Richard is contemplating picking up Bonny when she is trying to hitch a lift The narrator switches from person to person explaining what they are thinking at each point of time STYLE- I can always hitch another lift Bonny said Richard frowned You oughtnt to do that sort of thing Why not Its dangerous Any pervert could stop and pick you up Like
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