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Bridget's feedback:
"You've crafted a discussion that shows depth by bringing together analysis and personal reaction, substantiated in textual evidence. My first main note is regarding organization: the late biographical paragraph feels rather lost down at the end; moving it earlier will create a more logical presentation, but we can also use the opportunity to consider if the reader needs this information to follow your discussion. I recommend a combination of the two: streamline the information down to relevant details that enhance your paper's discussion, and move that to the opening of the essay.
Similarly, I recommend grouping all personal commentary in a single, robust paragraph toward the end (including "this book was thoroughly enjoyable..." from para. 1). This allows you to first present the analytical discussion, building ethos, before moving into the personal. Once you've done that, I encourage you to revise a bit for flow and efficiency by fusing together the first two paragraphs, making changes as needed; a similar task with the first two sentences will also be a productive exercise in efficiency, flow, and focus. From there, you can read over your body paragraphs and consider moments that are redundant, both information- and phrasing-wise, and tighten up the overall presentation.
As a final note, the discussion about Crooks feels incomplete without reference to race.
Fuse first two paragraphs into one; streamline first two sentences into one"
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Kibin. (2024). How dreams threaten survival in of mice and men by john steinbeck. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/how-dreams-threaten-survival-in-of-mice-and-men-by-john-steinbeck-1gxwLQRb
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