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Kibin. (2024). Effects of anabolic steroids on athletes. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/anabolic-steroids-and-its-negative-effects-on-athletes-CIjqYO68
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"Your essay contains much information, but it needs better organization. Work on continuity. For example, you start a paragraph by mentioning the two types of anabolic steroids, but you go nowhere with this. Instead, you launch into a discussion of mood swings. The content of a paragraph should flow from its first sentence. Check your facts; I don’t believe HDL is necessarily always good. Consider deleting unnecessary information. For example, in the context of this paper, how important is it to know the various routes by which athletes obtain these drugs? Consider the focus, and eliminate material that lies outside of it. This essay ends abruptly. You need a conclusion that summarizes your findings. Finally, remember that you are not the topic of this paper, and you should eliminate the first person. You have several problems with grammar, such as comma splices, and running two thoughts together in a sentence. You should run a grammar check, and consider remedial study."
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Kibin. (2024). Effects of anabolic steroids on athletes. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/anabolic-steroids-and-its-negative-effects-on-athletes-CIjqYO68
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1. "Effects of Anabolic Steroids on Athletes." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/anabolic-steroids-and-its-negative-effects-on-athletes-CIjqYO68.
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