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Adoption's Power to Break and Create Families

This essay explores issues related to adoption in America, including factors in decision-making, who and what regulates the process, and potential risks. The student notes that increasing oversight will continue to improve placement and the experience of children.
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Bridget's feedback:

"This is a solid draft that provides a good foundation to move forward in the writing process. Your evidence is researched and arrayed on the page in a clear overall structure. I anticipate you'll be focusing on refining both higher- and lower-order concerns. For the former, there remains room to tighten up the argumentation. I recommend focusing the historical background (the 1917 date seems most relevant to your discussion; anything before feels too distant); your counterargument/counterexample paragraph is off to a good start but should present a more robust and direct response to satisfy that area of the discussion. At the sentence level, integrate your quotations into the text rather than leaving them to stand on their own; this will allow a smoother reading experience and assert control over the literature."

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