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The High Costs of America's Complex Welfare System

This problem-solution essay on poverty in America at the end of the twentieth century argues for reform of an overburdened and unnecessarily complex system. The student focuses on the changes resulting from the Welfare Reform Act of 1996 (TANF).
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Bridget's feedback:

"This draft shows a density of detail and evidence that demonstrates your research; the use of in-text citations helps establish credibility. You are working with a lot of moving parts: to make sure your readers can follow the various threads, I recommend some next steps oriented around organization and streamlining. These will include revising for consistency and logical progression (e.g., presenting 1935 and then moving back to 1601 in the first paragraph may confuse the reader's sense of the sequence and movement), eliminating unnecessary details or filler phrases (e.g., "For most of history, ...", ineffective metaphor comparing people to pets) to keep the discussion focused and the paragraphs manageable for the reader, and making sure proper mechanics and an error-free text facilitate the reader's focus and overall clarity."

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