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Three Things that Would Inspire Me to Overthrow the Government

This personal opinion essay lists three actions by the American government that would inspire the student to revolt: mandatory conscription, the right to vote, and raising taxes unfairly. The student finds precedent for objection in America's own history.
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Bridget's feedback:

"Your writing and style is dynamic and energetic; the reader can sense the interest and passion in your words. The essay is well organized, with focused paragraphs and an overall structure that facilitates the discussion.

As you move into the next draft, take some time to focus on clarity and directness of communication on the lower-order level. Never subordinate precision to a stylistic turn of phrase. I struggle to comprehend what, exactly, is being described in the second body paragraph. Second, make sure the reader knows the purpose of the essay by the end of the first paragraph; for example, this is not clearly demarcated as a personal essay until the note at the end: more use of personal pronouns in the introduction might help establish this. Similarly, shift passive voice usage into statements that incorporate you as the rhetor."

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