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Kibin. (2024). Carl orff's philosophies in music education and influence on teaching children. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/carl-orffs-philosophies-in-music-education-HcoglQQz
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Bridget's feedback:
"This essay is very strong on many levels, including writing mechanics, content demonstrating mastery of the topic, and controlled progression through the discussion, which balances analysis and summary/historical narrative.
My main comment is regarding paragraphing, which runs into a few obstacles in this draft. This may be the result of document or file formatting, as the existing paragraphs seem to be random line breaks (falling in the middle of a sentence, for example). These should be cleaned up. Assuming those are accidents, I don't see paragraphing otherwise: a task to head into the final draft will be to impose paragraphs that help guide the reader through the discussion, both in terms of shaping the logic of the presentation and as visual signposting.
As a final note, I recommend revising "What Orff is trying to say here is...", which reads rather casually; and, unless you truly feel (i.e., have analyzed) he only tries (but does not successfully) express this , I recommend a more precise verb choice."
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(Kibin, 2024)
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Kibin. (2024). Carl orff's philosophies in music education and influence on teaching children. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/carl-orffs-philosophies-in-music-education-HcoglQQz
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("Carl Orff's Philosophies in Music Education and Influence on Teaching Children.")
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"Carl Orff's Philosophies in Music Education and Influence on Teaching Children." Kibin, 2024, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/carl-orffs-philosophies-in-music-education-HcoglQQz
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