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Omar Alahmed SherryELC 501051June 15 2012Overusing the Internetcs some people feel that there is a lackwc that has to be filledso they overuse the thing that would make them feel satisfied orfulfilled However why would anyone sit in front of a screen for hoursThere are a perfect three out of many answers for this question whichare a lot of free time accessiblewf conj using it for schoolpurposesexcept internet There are a lot of outdoor activities that areenjoyable healthier and better than sitting with no physical activityFor instance instead of sitting in front of a screen for hours you cango hiking biking and jogging and these are just a three out of avariety of activities internet access which you can connect without the need of Wi-Fi Letme give you an example if you entered a place and you see all eyes onthe floor and your eyes on the skyp do not think that there is aproblem with them and your status is better the answer would be thatyou do not have a smart phone The speed of the Internet has developedby over the years it startsvt with kilobits and now it is megabitsThese three reasons show that the Internet is one of the most accessiblethings in the world coming to class was one of the difficulties for some people but sincethey started online classes there is no more excuse for lazy studentsBesides artnegatives that internet has broughtp it has a hugepositive side userOmarYour causeeffect first draft is quite good and I enjoyed reading it Nice work on the structure and organization of your paper You willnotice however that there are a few issues that will need attentionduring the revision process Please take a look at my comments aboveand address these issues to help strengthen your paper overallGrade 82Alahmed PAGE MERGEFORMAT 1 deleteawkFailure of what Can you clarify herevoidawkFix this throughout your paperYou need a different opening
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