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The Mystery Surrounding the Black Hole

This paper discusses the origins and properties of black holes and associated concepts.
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Jim's feedback:

"This paper is informative, but the writing would benefit from attention to details. “Black hole” should be placed in quotation marks when referred to as a term. A phrase such as “is no longer exerting” is more economical and easier to understand as “no longer exerts.” The possessive form of “it” is “its.” We write “size-to-weight” when referring to a ratio, and terms such as “two dimensional” should also be hyphenated. The phrase “common anomaly” is interesting, since an anomaly is uncommon by definition. “Theory of relativity” should be neither capitalized nor enclosed in quotation marks, and neither should “black holes” or “destiny” be capitalized. On the other hand, “nasa” is spelled as “NASA.” The writer should not overuse the word “very,” which tends to add little useful information. Especially in a technical paper, numbers greater than nine should be written as numerals. A sentence on page 2 is a good example of needless complexity. One could write, “Danish astronomer Ole Christenson discovered in 1676 that light travels at a high but finite speed.” Notice that this rewritten sentence has no commas, compared to five in the original. “Therefore” is misspelled. A left parenthesis has no preceding space. The paper includes both “wormhole” and “worm hole.” This should be spelled consistently. Book titles should be italicized."

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