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Pancho Villa and the Mexican Revolution

In this informative history essay, the student describes the life of Francisco "Pancho" Villa, including Villa's early experiences in the hacienda system, the Mexican Revolution, Pershing and the Buffalo Soldiers, and the assassination in 1923 that ended Villa's life.
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This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Bridget's feedback:

"You've written a dynamic and interesting essay that handles the historical details, the broader narrative, and the context well, demonstrating control of the information. The writing itself shows a good sense of narrative flow, pacing, and sentence variety, capturing and maintaining the reader's interest and attention. I suggest including a bibliography after the essay to help the reader get a sense for your research and the literature on this topic (or, depending on your style guide and any assignment instructions, in-text citations as needed).

The main knock to the grade is the presence of errors: these are frequent and at times impact clarity. Whether these are typos or mechanics errors, make sure to proofread before any final submission. Some recurring issues include missing articles (a, the) and similar dropped words. There are also several moments where a pronoun (e.g., "he returned to join...") or use of passive voice ("were gathered and burned...") makes it hard to track who is performing the action: these are not errors, but spend some time making those small adjustments for clarity and precision."

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