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Parenting as a Factor in Antisocial Behavior among Youths

In this argumentative essay, a student asserts that parenting practices in Nigeria are promoting antisocial behavior in youths. The student describes how TV exposure, poverty, and domestic problems are all contributing to the development of misguided young people.
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Angela's feedback:

"You've identified some important factors in a young person's development, and it's good that although your paper is focused on parenting practices, you also acknowledge that once they reach a certain age, children have to learn to be responsible for their own actions. However your essay could be greatly improved in terms of formatting and writing conventions. Instead of relying on a numbered list, your work would be more compelling if you combined your shorter paragraphs into a distinct introduction and conclusion and then revised your body paragraphs. There are also many grammar and punctuation errors that should be addressed with a thorough edit. For example, there are a number of run-on sentences and sentence fragments that have been created from misplaced pieces of punctuation."

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