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An Introduction to the Life-Changing Disease of Multiple Sclerosis

In this essay, the student provides an overview of multiple sclerosis, including how symptoms are divided into three categories and the unique progression of the disease in each individual. The student explains they have been inspired to do this research following a family member's MS diagnosis.
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Bridget's feedback:

"This is off to a good start, with a clear focus and statement of purpose, logical presentation of detail, and an overall solid structure that places the reader at each step of the discussion. Incorporating your sources, either through in-text citations or a bibliography, will enhance persuasiveness by giving the reader a sense of your research work and can also help interested readers keep investigating the topic via your sources.

My main comment is regarding lower-order concerns, including occasional capitalization errors (primary, depression) and similar minor issues (spell out the number three each time). Proofread to catch those for a polished final product."

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