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"Yours are interesting thoughts on a topic of huge importance. Your second paragraph starts with a poorly structured sentence. It might be technically correct except that the first clause is not a complete thought. Strive for simplicity and concision, as long sentences tend to confuse. Take care not to capitalize common nouns. In addition, you never explicitly explain the Luddite concept. For example, what is the role of Nottinghamshire? Who was Ludd? Consider recapping the movement in a sentence or two. You should follow “i.e.” with a comma. Stylistically, it is preferable not to write “controlled” twice within a few words, and the use of shorter paragraphs helps readers to follow your ideas. Note that the material is truncated at the end of page 2.
Your introduction lacks focus, while the conclusion is more specific, and is not really related. The conclusion is too long. Summarize your ideas in one paragraph, and then provide a targeted conclusion in its own paragraph. Your conclusion should sell your ideas, and to do that requires precision. Otherwise, readers will not remember it."
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Kibin. (2024). Luddites, labor, and the technological revolution. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/luddites-labor-and-the-technological-revolution-hVVfT9hZ
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