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The Life and Afterlife of Pharaoh, Builder, and Warrior Ramses II

This essay on Ramses II (Ramesses the Great) explores his legacy as a builder and warrior. The student also explores his personal life and afterlife; buried in the Valley of the Kings, his mummy was, at the time of the writing of the essay, at the Cairo Museum.
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This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Bridget's feedback:

"This essay demonstrates excellent control over the subject material, and you've chosen an engaging set of details (the Turin Papyrus, the discussion about building speed and its impact on the art) that creates depth and interest for the reader. The overall structure and flow are logical, but the movement into "Most famous of his military engagements..." is very abrupt; I wondered if some material went missing, at first. It is not until the end of the paragraph ("...recorded 'his' victory on several monuments") that the two threads come back together, so this may be a matter of revising or crafting a topic sentence to signpost this point earlier."

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