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Understanding the History of Communism to Predict Future Viability

This essay overviews the history of communism as thought and practice, differentiates Marx and Engels' vision from totalitarianism, and argues that only a worldwide system of communism will be viable in the age of the internet and global markets.
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Bridget's feedback:

"This essay shows excellent control of the topic, guiding the reader through the presentation with a good sense of pacing, balance of detail and broader statements, and structure. You will want to adjust your page and line formatting per your style guide; in the absence of one, double-spacing and traditional paragraph formatting (indents) will still create a better reading experience. I question the need for the very long Engels quotation, which clocks in at longer than some of the body paragraphs; can you distil this down or select the most salient phrasing? (Also, "Engel" appears as a misspelling throughout the paper).

That error (which will have an outsized impact on ethos, despite its strengths elsewhere) notwithstanding, the language shows good syntax and diction. I do see occasional errors that you should catch with a proofread (including sentence fragments), as well as opportunities to continue refining syntax for an even smoother reading experience. For example, consider fusing together the first two sentences of your conclusion, e.g., "The nature of our modern one-world market means that only a worldwide communism will succeed." This changes the emphasis, so you will want to consider such revisions from those angles, but note how the streamlined revisions, including eliminating the often-clunky "This is because..." phrase, keeps things moving."

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