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I didnt want to just get better for myself my coach or my team I wanted to get better for my dad I felt like I was letting him downIn my freshman year in baseball I batted 047 For those who dont know baseball very well thats only hitting one ball for every 20 at bats When I would go up to the plate I could hear the laughingO look Thyes up I wonder whats going to happen The sly remarks that it was inevitable that I was going to strike out even before the first pitch Every other strikeout I could see the look of disappointment on my coaches face What my coach thoughtphhh I could care less What really mattered was what my dad thought My dad is a bigger guy about 511 230 pounds and he loved to watch sports just like every other dad When I would look at him I could just see he was disappointed but I knew he would never tell me that After every game he would tell me good job but it felt like he never meant it For the next year I worked on my hand eye coordination my swing my fielding and every other aspect of the game To become better I knew that it would take hard work and dedication My dad started noticing me out in the yard hitting the rock hard baseball attached to my crappy basketball hoop and throwing the baseball into the net He started coming out and helping me and giving me tips One day when we got talking I said to himDad were you ever disappointed in me when I would play terrible Without missing a beat my dad said to me Son you always made me so proud because every time you would fail you wouldnt let it get to you and you would never give upThis time when I looked into his eyes I
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