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i want to talk about The Beauty Center because i think its related in avery important way to everything ive done with The Loving Care Club ialso think that it adds a fresh narrative to a very banal story about ameaningful moment in a volunteer club i want to say that i likedcosmetology and so i pursued that with a group of friends we wanted tohelp people the only way we knew how but while we were planning for theclub we started feeling that we really did have the power to do a otmore and when sarah came to our school and showed us her power pointabout the children of her orphanage we knew exactly how we could domore the shift from making a cosmetology club to a very personalcharity club is a nice note i want to say that the beauty center wouldhave been a fine club but the loving care club is good too in adifferent way in the end what we really learned form all of it was whatwas working at the center which was me and my friends working togetherorganizing these club because we knew we could and that the beautycenter played the very important role of getting us to a point where wefelt confident about our abilities to make a differencewhat is stopping you from saying all of that in a 150 word essayits a lot to cover in only 150 words i have to explain the beautycenter then i have to explain why we changed our minds and i have tosay what we changed our minds to then i have to explain why i wouldtalk about the beauty center at all if the essay is about a differentclubtry to do it in parts can you explain just the beauty centermy friends and i had a common interest in cosmetology we decided thatwe should make a club and the reason we thought we should do thatinstead of just sharing tips
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