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An Analysis of the Fight for Women's Rights in Modern India

This essay on women's liberation movements in India examines access to education, work and income, gender roles in the home, and protection under the law. The student emphasizes grassroots activism over state-funded philanthropic organizations associated with elites.
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Bridget's feedback:

"You've brought together a lot of information to support your argument, the passion and investment of which comes through. I recommend focusing on two tasks as you move forward that can help with presentation, organization, and ethos. First, take some steps to evoke further control over your sources. The in-text citations are an excellent start, and this can be enhanced by signal phrases and other elements that help the reader understand the authority of the source. Many of the body paragraphs open with an unintegrated quotation. Frame or otherwise introduce those quotations using your own words to help guide the reader's encounter with the information and tone. For example, your reader isn't quite prepared to understand the use of the first Billington quote: do you agree with that description? are you presenting it as ironic and thus as a critique?

Your current paragraphs are focused, but they are often very long and dense (the latter issue can also be addressed by bringing your page formatting into alignment with your style guide). I recommend more paragraphing, as when a discussion goes into a specific extended example, to help signpost for the reader the shifts and nuances of your writing."

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