How to Write Good Hook Sentences
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In a 1971 fight, Joe Frazier famously floored boxing champ Muhammad Ali with a strong left hook, leading to Ali’s first ever professional loss in the boxing ring. This is most definitely not the source of the word “hook” in writing, but the analogy is as solid as Frazier’s punch. No matter what type of writing project you’re getting into right now, you need a strong hook that knocks your readers’ socks off and gets their attention.

When I talk about good hook sentences, I’m talking about that juicy string of words that make up the first sentence (or two) of your writing project—the words that grab your readers’ attention and don’t let go.

Good hook sentences say, “Drop everything you’re doing and read me right now,” without actually coming out and just saying that.

Writing good hook sentences is critical in all types of writing disciplines from essays and marketing copy to novels and short stories. Hooks are even used in song lyrics.  I’m sure, on more than one occasion, you’ve fallen victim to an earworm (a set of lyrics that you can’t get out of your head). That’s because you got hooked. I got the eye of the tiger… oh…um, sorry, I wasn’t listening to Katy Perry, I swear!

Now, here’s the catch. There’s no single, tried and true formula to writing good hook sentences. There is no specific order of nouns, verbs, and adjectives that will get the job done. But when it comes time to KO your readers, this post will give you four simple steps to help you craft your perfect hook.

Good Hook Sentences Step 1—Identify Your Audience

Your hook sentence, just like the rest of your writing project, needs to speak to your specific audience. Getting the attention of a college professor is going to be a vastly different task than getting the attention of a group of stay-at-home moms, for example. Before you write your hook, ask yourself three key questions:

Question 1: Who is my audience?

It’s important to identify your audience no matter what type of writing project you’re working on. Doing so will help you select a message that speaks to them.

If you’re trying to get the attention of a bunch of middle school girls, for example, you either need to be Justin Bieber in the flesh or write a hook that is geared toward that age group.

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If, however, your writing project is geared toward the admissions counselors at a prestigious university, you had better get a haircut, Bieber, and write your sentence appropriately.

Before setting out on this writing adventure, make note of your intended audience.

Question 2: Do I have a captive audience?

This question is important because it will help you better understand the purpose of your hook.

In the case of your teacher or an admissions counselor, you pretty much have a captive audience. They are being paid to read your writing. So the intention of your hook is to keep these people from falling asleep on the job, to entice them to give you a good grade, or to convince them to admit you into their institution.

If you’re writing a blog, a book, or marketing copy, then your audience is not captive, meaning they have a choice to read your work or not. Whether your writing appears online, at the bookstore, or on a publishing agent’s desk, your work is one second away from being skipped over in favor of the next piece of writing. In this scenario, a good hook is the lifeline of your writing.

Question 3: What matters to my audience?

Finally, you need to figure out what is important to your audience. Are they interested in solving a particular problem? Are they looking for a specific type of information? Do they want to know something interesting about you? Do they want to know that you understand a particular topic? Are they looking to be entertained?

Write down what matters to your audience.  This will help you craft your ultimate hook sentence.

Good Hook Sentences Step 2—Identify the Purpose of Your Writing

The next important issue to determine is the purpose behind your writing. A good hook sentence must be consistent with your writing. You can’t just write an awesome sentence because it’s awesome, and then go off onto another topic entirely. That would just make you look like a crazy person.

Good Hook SentencesFor example, if you are writing an argumentative essay, your hook should reflect the strength of your argument, perhaps by stating a shocking fact.  On the other hand, if you’re writing a love story, you might start off writing a sweet and romantic anecdote. And if you’re writing a frightening essay on the topic of nuclear warheads, you might select to begin with a chilling statistic.

When identifying your purpose, ask yourself these two questions:

Question 1: How do I want my audience to feel?

Your answer could be that you want them to feel frightened, or motivated to action, or warm and fuzzy like they have a cute puppy on their lap, or interested in your life story.

The point is to write a hook that elicits the types of feelings you want your audience to have.

Question 2: What do I want my audience to take away?

Your answer could be that you want them to be better educated on a certain topic, or that you want them to question reality, or that you want them to believe in love again.

A good hook will reflect the purpose of your writing and set the stage for how you want your audience to feel and what you want them to take away from your work.

Good Hook Sentences Step 3—Choose Your Hook Wisely

Just as there is more than one way to skin a cat  (not that I would know–I like my cats with skin and fur on them), there is more than one way to write a compelling hook that will grab your readers’ attention.

Here are a few of those ways:

1. Tell a humorous anecdote.

2. Reveal a startling fact.

3. Give an inspirational quote.

These are only three of many types of hooks. I could go on and on and on, but instead I created a resource just for you that features 14 different types of hooks plus example sentences.

To get this awesome resource and start your ideas flowing, just enter your email in the box at the bottom right of this screen. Your exclusive hook sentences will be instantly sent to your inbox.

Good Hook Sentences Step 4—Craft Your Hook

Now that you’ve considered your audience, the purpose of your work, and settled on the type of hook you want to write, it’s time to make it shine. A good hook sentence will use only the right words and will be as polished and refined as possible.

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Honestly, this is how you should approach writing all of your sentences, but if you only have one absolutely perfect sentence in your work, let it be your hook.

One more note: even though your hook sentence is your very first sentence, it’s a good idea to write it last. By writing it last, you can better capture the tone and purpose of your entire writing project.

Remember, a good hook sets up expectations about your writing, establishes your credibility as a writer, grabs your readers’ attention, and makes them eager to read your work. If you need inspiration, you might check out these 400,000 example essays. If you need help polishing your hook sentence, Kibin editors can help with that!

Good luck!

 

*Cover image credit: Spray flies from the head of challenger Joe Frazier, left, as heavyweight champion Muhammad Ali connects with a right in the ninth round of their title fight in Manila. (AP Photo/Mitsunori Chigita, File)

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  • ancient

    Naomi.well done!!.i now have an idea what is a hook…trying to write an argumentative essay and dont have a clue but getting there

  • jeff

    my name is jeff

    • That’s a pretty simple hook. 🙂

      • Joy

        I am writing about leadership, I don’t know how to start the hook. Can you give me some suggestions?

        • Hi Joy–maybe you could start with an anecdote that describes the epitome of a leader. Can you think of a leader (either in the industry you are writing about or in bigger terms) and tell a brief 1-2 sentence story about him or her?
          Good luck!
          Naomi

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    thank you Naomi T. this was very helpful!

  • Scottie

    What should of hook should I use for my English project? I have to write a paper about why my partner is a Star Student at University Park. Any help?????

    • I would start with an interesting short story or anecdote about something that your partner did that proves how good a student s/he is. Give yourself about two sentences to share the anecdote.

  • Nathlyn Yap

    Hello there 🙂 I’m supposed to write an argumentative essay with the title: Should development be focused on healthcare or leisure? How do I hook this? (p/s: thanks for the helpful articles!)

    • Hi! Sounds like you should start with a startling statistic about leisure or healthcare. I’d choose the one that you are arguing in favor of focusing on.

      Good luck!

  • Khadiza Sumaiya

    Hello 🙂
    I am writing an argumentative essay on the topic “plastic Surgery in South Korea”.
    Can you help me with a hook sentence? 🙂

    • Hi! I’d suggest you start with an interesting fact/statistic about the plastic surgery industry in South Korea. I read in this article that 1 in 5 South Korean women get plastic surgery, how does this compare to the U.S. or another country? http://travel.cnn.com/seoul/visit/ideals-beauty-plastic-surgery-capital-world-389581

      Or maybe you could talk about how the most common surgery is eyelid surgery (which is practically unheard of in other countries).

      Good luck!

  • michaela

    hi i am writting a essay on heroism can u give me a hook sentence

    • Hi Michaela, I’d start by telling an interesting story or anecdote about an act of heroism. Good luck!

  • Rismy Rally

    i am writing an essay about online piracy, can you help me with a hook sentance.

    • Your hook will depend on whether you are trying to argue that online piracy is a problem or not. If you’re arguing that it’s a problem, you could talk about how much money is stolen per year from a certain industry (music? movies?) via online piracy. I bet that’s a pretty astounding number! Good luck!

  • I would tell a short (1-2 sentence) story about your first or most memorable (positive) experience in your favorite sport or activity.

  • Hmmm… you could maybe start with a famous quote from the beginning of one such speech! Here are some from Cicero: http://listverse.com/2012/02/17/20-great-quotes-from-cicero/

  • I would suggest writing a short anecdote about that moment where you were closest to failure… what made you turn around? Good luck!

  • You might start with a fact about how many immigrants apply to become US residents every year, and compare that with how many immigrants actually succeed each year.

  • Afsha

    The directions to my personal statement are: Please write a statement of your personal goals in graduate study including how they relate to your future professional objectives. Also, include information about experiences or skills which may be relevant to your application, your expectations of the graduate degree program at Western Illinois University, and the reasons for your interest in an assistantship

    I am applying to a Masters of Psychology with a concentration in Clinical Mental Health. I also am applying to Masters of Counselor Education.

    How am I suppose to make this an interesting essay and have a good hook? I was thinking putting a quote about furthering your education. I just don’t know how to make this essay interesting.

    • Hi Afsha,

      I would recommend against starting with a quote about furthering your education. That seems a bit contrived and off topic. You really want to try to be authentic in your statement! The question asks you to discuss your experiences/skills. Maybe you could start with a story about something you experienced in your psychology/mental health internships or studies. Did something very profound happen in your history that shaped your desire to go into this field? If so, that would be the best place to start.

      I also recommend reading this post: https://www.kibin.com/personal-statement-writing-blog/personal-statement-advice-experts/

      While it’s geared toward undergrad apps, I think there is some really solid advice in there about the importance of telling your story and defining your purpose.

      Good luck!

  • Eren

    I’m writing an essay arguing what are the main characteristics that a survivor possess. I really don’t know how the get my readers attention??

    • Hi Eren, you could really grab your readers’ attention by telling a story of a survivor. Those first few moments where someone realizes that they just made it past harm’s way. Try to tell this in 2-3 short sentences. You don’t even have to complete the story, just draw the reader in to the drama and then complete it later. Your best choice would be the story of a real life survivor… whether that be a famous story or a personal story depends on where you are going with this essay.

  • Anne Marie

    hi
    i am writing a persuasive essay about using social media correctly….question is how do i write a hook about this?

    • An interesting hook might be a statistic on how many people lost their jobs or were otherwise penalized for using social media INCORRECTLY (if such a statistic exists). Or maybe, you can talk about how much time people spend on social media each day. Good luck!

  • Anne Marie

    or maybe how i can start the introduction about it? 🙂

  • Hi there, Maybe you can launch with the interesting fact that some of the world’s most well known people majored in humanities. Here is a list: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2014/01/28/the-unusual-college-major_n_4654757.html

    Good luck!
    Naomi

  • Gelleyn

    I am writing about:
    In general, is it permissible to consciously and intentionally harm a smaller number of people to prevent greater harm to a larger number of people especially in cases that offer no alternatives in achieving the goal?
    I don’t know how to start a hook. Do you have any suggestions?

  • Charmaine

    hi I am writing an argumentative essay about “TV and films influence children than their parents” I’m on the affirmative side. Can you pls help me with the hook sentence or attention catcher? I really need to make the introduction good cuz my prof will not check it if the intro is boring.

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    • Hi Gloria, I signed you up for the resource. You will need to confirm your subscription. Cheers! Naomi

  • gloria

    Hi
    I’m writing about religions but I’m having trouble with the hook.( Christianity, Judaism,and Islam) can you help me understand this please.

  • Emily Piñon

    I am writing a biography about someone how would I start of the essay

    • I would start with a short, fascinating story about this person. Just a couple of sentences about something they experienced that is really attention grabbing. Then you can leave the reader hanging and finish the story later in the paper. For example, “Bill Gates always hoped to become a millionaire by age 30, but he ended up becoming a *billionaire* by age 31. This is the story of how he achieved so much so quickly.”

  • Alfredo

    im talking about why the pledge should be revised, any ideas?

  • A great hook for this type of essay would be a sad, true story about a dog who was abused under these circumstances. This would definitely get your readers’ attention!

  • You might start by discussing the wide earnings gap between college grads and people who only graduate from high school. Or, if you are arguing for fewer college grads, you could dig up some statistics on how hard it is to find a job after college.

  • Lacie Blankenship

    Hi! Your blog post is really helpful and gives a great perspective on writing. I am writing an argumentative essay on the importance of the tradition of quilting. My thesis is, “Quilting is a part of American history worth of preservation.” How would you approach a hook for this topic?

    • Hi Lacie–
      I would start by telling the story of a particularly interesting quilt. I know that a lot of historical quilts have fascinating stories behind them. So choose a story that you can tell in a couple of sentences and that will draw your reader in.

      Cheers!

  • Bananna Ailen

    Hey! i need your help! 🙁
    i wrote an essay and my teacher said my intro didn’t make sense. I started off as “The characteristics of a human being could be represented as a symbol or a metaphor.” i think she didn’t like it because i was straight to the point. how would i add a hook there to give my beginning a higher energy.

    • Hi Bananna–
      I think your teacher may be struggling with this intro because it is a bit vague and unclear. It would probably help if you were more specific. For example: “Human characteristics are best represented via symbols and metaphors; for example XX is a symbol for creativity and YY is a metaphor for destruction and violence.”

      Obviously, I don’t know the exact human characteristics that you want to discuss, and haven’t spent time thinking of the appropriate metaphors/symbols either, so this is just an idea for how you can make this more clear for your teacher.

      Cheers!

  • Faizah Kabir

    Hi, I’m writing about Sophocle’s play Antigone and how she made the right choice of civilly disobeying a law. My teacher asked us to include the ‘where’ and ‘why’ parts in the hook. I don’t how to include those. Moreover, I don’t know how to even start the hook.

    • I think your professor wants you to dive into the crux of Antigone’s conflict. Where: ancient Greece. Why: conflict between the law of god vs. the law of man. So for example:

      According to ancient Greek belief, the law of the gods was the rule of the land. So it’s no surprise that Antigone struggled over whether to follow the law of King Creon or follow the law of the gods. On the one hand defying the King, and burying her brother, would lead to her certain death, but defying the gods would lead to punishment that was less tangible but with eternal consequence.

  • Kayla

    Hello, I am writing an argumentive essay about why uniforms should be in public schools. Any suggesttions?

  • Jeet

    I am writing about a personal essay for an eye for an eye. can someon please help me on how could i start my essay

    • You should start with a brief story of revenge that really drives home the concept of “an eye for an eye.”

      Cheers!

  • Raven

    Hi,
    I’m writing an argumentative paper about whether medications are more helpful than hurtful in patients with mental disorders. What kind of hook should I use?

    • Hi Raven–I could see you going two ways here. 1. would be a shocking statistic about the state of mental disorders (in the U.S. or wherever your focus is). 2. Would be a short anecdote about a patient who either was medicated or unmedicated (depending on your stance) and how that medicine worked (or didn’t work) for him or her. Good luck!

  • You could intro with a story about the strange court cases that arise when fetuses are granted personhood, like this one: http://www.41nbc.com/story/d/story/court-case-takes-up-when-fetuses-become-people/10457/e_5Y2WPyYE-vFy2p7957wA

  • Is there a quote in the book that really exemplifies this hardship? You could start there.

  • Tricia Dalida

    I’m really bad with essays.. how do you think i should start my hook? I am writing an argumentative essay about the show 16 and pregnant preventing or promoting teen pregnancy

    • Quickly and vividly recap a scene from 16 and Pregnant that vividly shows your argument. For example, if you think that the show promotes pregnancy–open with a depiction of how one of the young mom’s enjoys a lavish lifestyle with a new Jeep and a nice apartment furnished by her father all while starring in an MTV television show.

      If you think it prevents it, do the obvious and start with a recap of a scene that shows the heart wrenching struggles of teen pregnancy.

      Good luck!

      • Tricia Dalida

        Thank you so much! I didn’t think you would have time to answer my question.. but you did! 🙂 Have a nice life!

  • Debora Otero

    I’m having a difficulty starting my essay. How should I start an essay about how dynasties impact the society?

  • aman

    hi. i am writing on ‘should children have right to choose their dream or they should follow their parents dream! can you suggest me a good hook please.

    • Depending on the type of essay, maybe you could share a personal experience about whether you ever felt pressured to follow your parents’ dreams. Either way, what does that feel like from a child’s perspective?

  • agat

    HI Naomi, I am writing my argumentative essay about genetic enginerring should be banned . Do you recon a big hook ?

  • Oooh… what if you took the perspective of the five-year-old in his last moments of life… try to paint a picture of the fear of that moment…. that would be chilling and captivating, and really sad!

  • Maybe you can start with an interesting statistic on this. For example, “Students who participate in extracurricular activities in high school are X% more likely to attend college than students who do not.” I haven’t done your research, so I’m not sure if there is something like this out there–but that could be an interesting way to start.

  • Bella

    Hi i’m writing a narrative essay about stress..if i start my hook statement which a quote , can it be accepted such as : According to Lou Holzt “its not the load that….. ” .

  • Sara C.

    Hi! I have a presentation about The Yellow Wallpaper by Charlotte Perkins Gilman that I desperately need a hook for. This is my thesis:
    The connotation of the word creep used throughout the Yellow Wallpaper implies an “insect-like” movement which metaphorically illustrates women’s role in society through Jane.

    Do you have any ideas?

    • What a great thesis statement! For your hook, you could definitely play with the insect metaphor… maybe paint a vivid picture of what it was to be a woman in this era all while taking advantage of the insect imagery.

      • Sara C.

        Thank you so much for your assistance!

  • Anna

    I’m writing an essay on A Separate Peace, but I don’t know what to use for a hook. Any ideas? My thesis: Through Gene’s jealousy, the effects of Finny’s fall, and Finny’s death, John Knowles demonstrates that the codependency in Finny and Gene’s relationship was beneficial to both characters and helped them to establish a stronger idea of their identity.

    • Maybe you could start with a quote from the book that sums up the idea of codependency. Or if you can’t find one from within the book, maybe one from somewhere else…

  • alwaysshai xoxo

    I am arguing about student debt, and I am not sure how to start it off.

    • Hi there–this would be a good essay to lay out a shocking statistic about the amount of student loans that kids are graduating with these days. It’s pretty crazy!

  • Cortney

    Great post, very informative. Unfortunately, I am having a difficult time coming up with a good hook for my persuasive essay on the importance of fine arts in school. I am writing my essay in a letter format to the school board arguing that these programs should not be removed due to budget cuts because they are just as important to students as the core classes. Any suggestions for a great hook? Thank you!

  • Skeetah Smith

    Hi! I’m writing a argument essay on whether college athletes should be paid and I’m having trouble coming up with a hook. Any suggestions?

    • Your hook will depend on your stance (are you for or against paying college athletes?

      If you’re *for it, you might start with a short story about how many hours college athletes commit to training and playing each week. The most effective story would be a true example if you can find one.

      If you’re *against it, you might start with some statistics on all the benefits college athletes already get for playing on the school team. I hear they get more scholarships and sometimes get breaks on grades than the non-athlete students… is that true? What could you write about this?

      Good luck!

  • Mika Tanada

    Hi I am writing about ‘There is a just war’, I don’t know how to start the hook. Can you give me some ideas?

    • Is that the name of an article or story? If so, you might start with a compelling quote from the piece that sets the tone for your essay.

      • Mika Tanada

        No its not a name of an article. It’s the title I’ve taught of for my argumentative essay. Sorry my first message was not clear enough. I am writing an argument essay on whether there is such a thing as a just war.

        • In that case you could start with a short story about a positive impact that war has made on an individual or a situation. It would need to be very brief yet compelling.

  • sissi wang

    I’m writing an analytical compare and contrast essay (im in 7th grade) and my thesis statement is ” excessive control and authority can lead to rebellion ” for my hook im using a quote“The greatest crimes in the world are not committed by people breaking the rules but by people following the rules. It’s people who follow orders that drop bombs and massacre villages.” ― Banksy, Wall and Piece but i dont really know how to write it…? any suggestions?

    • First of all–I think you’re off to a GREAT start here (and I’m surprised you are only in 7th grade). I love that quote from Banksy, and I feel that it complements your thesis statement.

      I am a little concerned about your thesis statement though just because you say that you are comparing/contrasting something. From your statement, it’s impossible to tell what you are comparing. Control and authority as compared to what?

      Here is a helpful article for you to help you with the rest of your essay: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-compare-and-contrast-essay/

      Cheers!

  • Mika Tanada

    Hi, I am writing about religion where my title is God exist. How should I write the hook?

    • Hi Mika–first of all, you’ll want to change your title to “Does God Exist?” Then your hook will depend on your answer to that question. If your paper is arguing for the existence of God, you could start with a story about someone experiencing a miracle that proves divine existence. If your paper is arguing against the existence of God, you could do the opposite–find a story about someone who followed God and still ended up facing bad fortune and an unfair ending.

      Good luck!

  • Ryan Merica

    im writing an argumentative essay about if ATVs should be permitted on public lands and i cant think of a good hook

  • Arsh Shaikh

    Hey Naomi, I doing a writing to argue and my topic is Which is more important: Talent or
    Hard Work? I am on the hard working side. Need help on writing my hook and thesis statement. Please help ASAP, Thank you.

    • I think an effective hook would be to tell the story of someone who worked really hard to achieve something great. If you could find a story of someone famous that would be even better. (Unless this is a personal essay, in which case you should tell a story about yourself). Good luck!

      • Arsh Shaikh

        Thank you.

  • Ryan Merica

    im writing an argumentative essay about is ATVs should be permitted on roads and i can think of a good hook

  • savage af

    hi, i need a good hook for my book project. it is about how the setting is important to the revolutionary war. any ideas?

    • Maybe you can bring to life some element of the setting that you will be discussing in your paper by providing a vivid 1-2 sentence description. Good luck!

  • Korina Mamaril

    I’m writing an essay on the analysis of a character (Simon) in the book “The Lord of the Flies”. Simon represents goodness and humanity. Would you let me know if this is a pretty good way of using a quote in a hook?

    “We can’t help everyone, but everyone can help someone” (Reagan NP). These words, said by former U.S president, Ronald Reagan, accurately captures the everyday mind-set of Simon.

    • Hi there,

      I think this is very clever. If you directly attribute the quote to Reagan, you don’t even have to use the citation! Here is an edit for you:

      President Ronald Reagan once said, “We can’t help everyone, but everyone can help someone.” These words accurately capture the mindset of Simon, the Protagonist in Lord of the Flies by William Golding.

      Btw, you might also like this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/lord-of-the-flies-symbolism/

      Thanks for your comment, and good luck!

      Naomi

  • Tricia Dalida

    I am writing an argumentative essay about how college education is unnecessary. Would you PLEASE give me an idea for a good hook? I am so bad at writing essays.

  • Jennifer Prentice

    i am writing a refutation essay and need a good hook. The topic is I am arguing for Dumpster Diving. The Audience has a huge range for people who are homeless do this to people who make high dollars do this to a average housewife.

  • Betty

    I’m writing about the war of 1812. Please give me some ideas for a hook, n background

  • Joy

    I need a hook for this thesis statement lowering the cost of college can be affordable for people who are on welfare who wants to go to college and get a degree so they can get off public assistance

    • Maybe a statistic for how many people on welfare never got a college degree. I bet there is a correlation you could uncover there.

  • Fabricio Osvaldo Arce Derpic

    I’m writting about how negative comments shouldn’t affect women on their personality and self esteem. I need help with a strong hook.

    • Maybe you could start by quoting a particularly negative comment. I know that could get ugly, but it would definitely also grab a reader’s attention. Then you could question how a woman would likely respond to this real life comment.

  • Elleon

    I’m writing an argumentative paper on Frederick Douglass and John Lewis, do you have any idea of what kind of hook I could write? My Teacher wants about four sentences for the hook, but had thought it was supposed to be around one sentence.

    • If the teacher wants four, you should write four. Maybe start with a quote of the most compelling point of Lewis’ speech where he discusses Douglass.

  • I like the first one because it is more clear. But here is an edit:

    Society should not depend on technology because it is making people lazy and negatively affecting employees’ creativity, skills, and work ethic.

    I trimmed some of the original, because I’m afraid you are tackling a topic that is too big for one little paper–especially if you try to talk about employees AND students. I’d focus on one or the other.

    For your hook–maybe you can bring in a statistic for how many collective work hours are wasted browsing Facebook in a given work day. I’m not sure if something like that exists, but if it does, it would be interesting!

  • Natasha Marshall

    I am writing an argumentative essay on “Is media-multitasking possible for the human brain”, I am wondering what a good hook would be? Do you think writing about the average amount of media people use at one time would be good to incorporate in it?

    Also my argument is leading towards that it is not possible. Do you have any tips for how to write it and structure? I am not experienced in writing essays let alone an argumentative essay.

    Thanks

    Natasha

  • Harry Roddick

    I am writing about the current scale, scope and diversity of the festival industry. any ideas on writing a good hook which will entice my audience?

    • There has to be interesting stories that come out of the festival scene. Can you think of one that you can distill into a few short lines? I think this would be a great place to start.

  • rabia

    can you help me to start an essay about “nobody can stop me”

  • Ruby Gao

    Hi, Naomi. I’m in high school, and I’m writing an argumentative essay about Friar Laurence being the one to blame for the deaths of Romeo and Juliet in Shakespeare’s play. I am not sure how to write the hook. Could you help me?

  • It’s a song hook! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hook_(music)

    (and now it’s stuck in my head too 🙂

  • Nice one, Jen. 🙂

  • HELP!

    I am writing an essay about procrastination and it needs to be in third person but iI am haing a hard time making the hook and essay any ideas?

  • Tandi Angel

    Hi Naomi! I’m writing an argumentative essay about whether or not is it morally permissible to kill one innocent to save more innocent, and I’m completely stumped on what a good, captivating hook could be. Any tips?

  • Deric Rocha

    I am writing an essay on cinematic techniques between the movies Charlie and the chocolate factory and Edward scissorhands. I’m having trouble writing a hook for this essay, can you give me any tips?

    • It would be great if you could bring to life a scene from one of the movies. What is one scene that really stands out to you? Can you open with 2-3 sentences of detail from this scene?

  • An interesting angle here might be to begin with a brief description of a piece of graffiti, but describe it in a way that an art connoisseur might describe a famous oil painting. After a short description reveal that this is actually graffiti art…

  • You could perhaps open with a story about someone famous or well known who made it big thanks to a strong athletics department at his or her school.

  • Hi Tandi–maybe you could start by jumping right into a story about someone having to make a decision whether to kill an innocent person to save more innocent people. The train/trolley story comes to mind: http://www.scientificamerican.com/podcast/episode/killing-one-person-to-save-five-11-12-03/

  • Valentin

    I am writing an Expository essay to compare and contrast the journey the characters take, their character traits, and the themes of the two books. The books are “The Book of Job” and “The Odyssey.” I have no idea where to start with the hook. Can you help me?

    • You could start with a quote from one of the stories that drops the reader right into the journey. Or you could start with a provocative question of your own… What do the Bible and a Greek Epic have in common? More than one might think.

  • Stacey Taylor

    I need a hook for a persuasive speech for donating hair, time or money to Locks of.love.

  • For your thesis statement, pick a literary element to focus on (here are some ideas on themes: http://www.shmoop.com/book-thief/themes.html) Then for your thesis statement write something like this:

    Markus Zusak explores the theme of _____________ through the
    use of _________________ in his novel, The Book Thief.

    Your hook should tie neatly into your thesis statement by setting the scene with a quote from the book that epitomizes the literary aspect that you are picking apart.

    Good luck!

  • Khadija El-Maslouhie

    hello; i need a hook to start an essay about ” Norway proposes to criminalize beggars and those trying to help them.” thank you.

  • Sean

    Hello what would a good hook be for medieval warfare and the subtopics that I need to include are weapons, armor, and battle tactics.

  • juan

    lol

  • Giovanni Castellanos

    I am writing an essay on making friends online. Could you give me some help with the hook?

  • jillian walker

    Hello I need help writing a hook for JROTC essay the block the theme is a 100 years yesterday today tomorrow please help me

    • Hi there, you might check out how other students have addressed JROTC essays. Here are some examples: https://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/tag/ROTC

      Are you writing this essay as a personal narrative? If so, you might start with a compelling story about your experience in ROTC that ties in with the theme.

  • Zea Cole

    Hi, I’m writing a discursive essay about Grammar schools and Comprehensives. Any ideas for a good hook?

  • Naomi

    HI Naomi ! I’m writing an essay of 100 years of JROTC and I can’t think of an opening statement can you help me?
    P.S my name is Naomi, too.

    • Hi Naomi (great name!),

      You’re the second person to ask me this question, but I think my answer remains the same. Here are some example essays that show how other students have tackled similar essays: https://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/search/jrotc

      It seems these essays incorporate personal narrative, so I would suggest starting with a compelling/interesting story about your own experience with JROTC that ties into the theme.

      Good luck!

  • Jerry

    How can I start an analytical essay for a short passage?

  • BROOKE

    I am writing about fad diets and I have know clue what my hook should be. I have been contemplating and I cannot figure a hook out. What would be a good start?

    • You could probably give a really good/shocking statistic on how INEFFECTIVE fad diets are, and talk about how many people (Americans in particular?) fall for this type of diet every year. I’m sure there is a way that you could start your paper off really drawing your reader into how terrible these things are for you. Paint a picture and make it ugly (that is, assuming that you are arguing against fad diets in your paper. 🙂

      Another idea would be to write a two sentence story about one or two of the WEIRDEST/most dangerous fad diets that are out there.

      Don’t stress, have fun!

      Best,
      Naomi

  • helen

    Hi Naomi , I writing an evaluation essay on a presentation I delived on “Type of Trauma in Young Adults and how it may present itself” what would be a good hook that I could start with please,

    • This definitely calls for telling a short 2-3 sentence story of an adult struggling with trauma. Put your reader right in the middle of what this situation looks like.

  • krystal meza

    What do you think is a good argumentative essay topic?

    • Hi Krystal,

      Check out this blog post for 50 argumentative topic ideas: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/50-argumentative-essay-topics/

      I’m sure you can find something. 🙂 Thanks for the comment!

      Naomi

      • krystal meza

        I choose this one- In what situations, if any, does a woman have a right to an abortion? What do you think is a good hook and thesis?

        • Hi there,

          An emotional appeal would make a good hook for this. Tell a short story of a woman faced with an unexpected pregnancy. The details of this story will depend on your thesis statement.

          As for a thesis statement, you can use this general structure:

          A woman should have a right to an abortion in the event of X, Y, and Z.

          Or

          A woman should never have a right to an abortion because of X, Y, and Z.

          Or

          A woman should have full rights to an abortion because of X, Y, and Z.

          Good luck!

  • Emily

    HI Naomi ! I’m writing an essay about how a small good change can influence others life and I can’t think of any good hooks… Can you help me come up with one?

    • Hi Emily,

      You could start this type of essay off really strong by taking the reader right into a story about an example of this happening. If you are writing in first-person, you can tell a story about how a small change improved your life. If it’s more formal and third-person, tell a story about a small change improving the life of someone else (maybe from a news story or something?).

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • krystal meza

    Im writing an essay on abortion why it should not be legal. Do you have any good hook ideas?

    • Hi Krystal–I would suggest really going for an emotional appeal in your hook. Can you tell a story about abortion that would pull on your reader’s heartstrings? Good luck!

  • I would start with an exceptional story about someone helping someone else. Can you bring to life how that action feels? Helping someone is one of the most rewarding feelings in the world, so if you could bring that to life on the page you would draw your reader in for sure.

  • Prachi Kumari

    my topic is demographic india..what can be the hook sentence

  • Schalee Frasier

    Hi, I am writing a persuasive essay for my Comp II class and am stuck. My topic is “Should higher education be free for everyone?” but it is beginning to turn into the pros and cons of financial aid and political controversy over how it will be paid for if it is free. Any help would be amazing.

    Thank you!

  • Miepmuisje

    Maybe a little late, but how about ‘democracy is the worst form of government, except all those other forms that have been tried from time to time’ – Winston Churchill

  • tiffany

    hello i need help i am writting about how parent should react to report cards and dont know how to start with or write at all i need alot of hwlp plzz help me

    • The important thing to answer is how do you feel about this topic? Should parents be strict and stressful? Should they be calm and encouraging? How do your parents respond to report cards and how does that make you feel?

      I would suggest opening your essay with a story of parents opening up a report card and freaking out over a C grade, then go into your thesis statement arguing that parents should stay calm because all that stress is just going to make the student feel defeated.

      However, that’s just my perspective on the matter… what’s yours?

  • Hi Leah,

    Have you considered discussing the Black Lives Matter movement? I think this is one of the most powerful and profound acts of civil protest in a long while, and it really underlines Dr. King’s words. You might start by diving right into the center of the Black Lives Matter movement, maybe describing a scene from one of the the protests. I bet a little research on YouTube will yield such a scene that you could bring to life on the page, which would make a phenomenal hook.

    Good luck!

  • JO-nCena

    Democracy vs. Monarchy?

  • Robotcorner1

    I compared and contrasted poetic devices in 2 poems regarding hard work, skill, and coming of age. Any ideas for a hook? Thanks.

    • You could either start with a quote from one of the poems that really sets the tone for your analysis, or perhaps you could start by expounding on a “big idea” about the relationship between hard work, skill and coming of age that you will elaborate on more fully in your analysis.

      Good luck!

  • Colin

    Hi Naomi. I’m writing an argumentative essay to demonstrate how the American Dream isn’t all that it’s cracked up to be. Any suggestions for an awesome hook? Thanks.

    • Hi Colin–

      Maybe you could start with a short anecdote about someone who, despite his or her best efforts, just isn’t achieving this elusive dream. Or maybe you could start with a statistic about the shocking income disparity in the U.S.

      Good luck!

      • Colin

        Thanks Naomi. Those are fantastic suggestions.

  • Ryan Merica

    Hi so im writing an argumentative essay on the use of drones and i cant seem to think of a hook andd and if you need to know my point of view on the subject i am for the use of drones thanks.

  • kala sanders

    Hi Naomi, I am writing a argumentative paper on the Flint Michigan water issue and having a hard time coming up with a hook. Any suggestions?

  • I would start with a story about someone suffering simply because no one was willing to help out with even just the smallest act of charity. If you can bring this story to life, you will definitely catch your reader’s attention.

    • April

      Hello I am in need of a good thesis on serial killers/psychopaths nature vs nurture. Can you help?

      • Hi April–
        Have you chosen a side yet?
        Also, I would suggest either focusing just on serial killers or psychopaths (interchanging the two is going to cause problems).

        For example:

        The problem of serial killers is one of nature; they are genetically hardwired to murder as evidenced by 1, 2, and 3.

        Or

        The problem of serial killers is on of nurture; their upbringing leads them to murder as evidenced by 1, 2, and 3.

        Choose evidence that you can support from your research!

        Also you might find this post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/nature-vs-nurture-articles/

        Good luck!

  • RHodney

    Hey Naomi! I am writing about why saving money is important, rather than spending the money you earn all at once. I have no idea how to start a hook for this 🙁

  • Beatrice Klein

    Hey Naomi, I am writing my Argument Essay about the Refugee Crisis. I want to argue that we should let Refugees in but I am struggling to start the hook. Do you have any suggestions?

  • Breonna Burns

    Hi I am writing an argumentative paper on the rich vs the poor do you know any ideas for a hook for this topic

  • aksa

    I am writing about a world of conformity.Plz help Me out.

  • Maybe you could kick off by setting the scene. What was it like to be a slave in this country during the time leading up to the civil war? You could probably get some pretty good ideas from this: https://storify.com/yennaebekele/slavery-in-the-antebellum-era (lots of good potential links in that post) If you could bring that scene to life, it could be interesting.

  • kathi

    can you help with a hook regarding the obesity or overweight.

  • Hi Tyler–I think this guy does a great job of describing a funnel intro: http://www.saidsimple.com/content/100893/

    In it he says that you start with a general statement and then narrow your way down to your thesis statement. Your general statement (hook sentence) about the civil rights movement should be interesting and enticing. You could start with a compelling question that you will answer–something like “Where would our society be today without the Civil Rights Movement?” The exact question you ask will largely depend on your thesis statement.

    Good luck!

  • Have you found any interesting statistics that really bring to the forefront how many kids are dealing with mental health issues? I think that would be a great place to start. Maybe this will help you start thinking: https://www.nami.org/getattachment/Learn-More/Mental-Health-by-the-Numbers/childrenmhfacts.pdf

    Good luck!

  • Mona

    Hello, this is a really good post! I’m writing an essay about caring, responsibility and self-sacrifice. What is a good hook to start with? Thank you!

    • The best hook for this type of paper would be a brief story about someone doing something that embodies all of these qualities. Which story you choose to write about will depend on the details of your paper.

  • Rose Scar

    hi your post helped me alot with my essays but im struggling to find that one hook sentence that would help me a lot if you could give me an example on how i could hook my aduiance in an homeschool vs public school essay please?

    • The type of hook you choose will depend a lot on whether you are arguing that homeschooling or public school is better/more effective. For example, if you are arguing in favor of homeschooling, you could start by sharing a statistic of success rates experienced by homeschoolers (http://www.nheri.org/research/research-facts-on-homeschooling.html), or a story of one student who turned their home schooling background into a successful future.

      If you are arguing in favor of public schooling, you would definitely want to turn the above advice on its head.

      Good luck!

  • eliza

    Hello, I have a 15 page analytic paper that i have to write about Mary Rowlandson and I need a hook and a thesis. Could you help me? thanks!!

    • This is a big paper and a big topic! The first thing you need to do is narrow your focus. What specific aspect of Mary Rowlandson will you be discussing? What is your stance on this aspect? Ask questions who, what, where, when, and why? To help you narrow your focus.

  • Chantal Davis

    Hi, Naomi! I need to write a hook for an argumentative essay about the pros of drones for deliveries— any ideas?!
    Thanks!

    • Hi Chantal–it would fun and effective to drop your reader into a story about a future where drones deliver your stuff within a few hours of ordering it. Something like “Imagine the instant gratification of ordering a new iPhone and having it dropped on your doorstep within an hour of purchase. This could be the reality if drones for delivery are approved.” (My version could use improvement, but you get the idea.)

      • Chantal Davis

        Thank you so so so much, Naomi! ☺️☺️☺️ You are such a huge help!

  • Hi Kameron,

    Your hook will definitely depend on your stance on this topic. For example, if you are against drug testing for welfare recipients, go for an emotional story comparing a drug addicted welfare recipient who would be unable to feed her kids due to this law with a drug addicted person who happens to have money who won’t be penalized for the same problem. The only difference is one person has money and the other doesn’t.

    Or, if you are for drug testing welfare recipients, you could start, for example, with a statistic on how many welfare recipients are also drug users (if a stat like that exists) and set up an argument that the money is likely paying for drugs and not food/shelter.

    Good luck!

  • Amy S

    I am writing about nature vs nurture and the influences it has on children development. Can you give me some suggestions of a hook i could use?

  • yağmur

    Hi Naomi! I will write about ” to what extent is it an obligation to reciprocate a gift in your country?” Can you give me some suggestions ?

  • Celine琳蒽

    Hi, I’m writing about hook on how to succeed at a job interview. Can you give me some suggestions? Thanks 😀

    • Hi there– it could be fun to start off with a story of a really awkward job interview that isn’t going well. For example, “Joe Schmoe, a 25-year-old college grad, did nothing to prepare for his job interview at Corporation Z. When the interviewer asked ‘why do you want this job?’ Joe replied ‘my mom said I had to get a job and move out of her basement.’ Needless to say Joe did not get a callback.”

  • I think it’s hard to describe what the fetus might be going through since there is no way that you can actually confirm that experience. So that might be why you are having trouble there. You might actually start off by sharing some compelling statistics about depression among women who have had an abortion (be careful that you get this research from a valid source without a bias) or perhaps by sharing a story about a woman who regretted this decision. Or… you could start on a happier note and start with an uplifting story about adoption. Good luck!

  • Carol

    I’m writing an oral presentation on sexism in Australian society, and I have no idea how to start the intro! and I’m not sure how to write the conclusion either, it’s quite messy :/

  • amac1004

    Hello, I have to write an argumentative research paper about “Surveillance,Has or Has Not become reality in 2016.” any suggestions would be very much appreciated

    • Hi there– My concern for you is that your topic doesn’t lend itself to argument. I think pretty much everyone would agree that surveillance is a reality in 2016–so you’re going to get stuck arguing an obvious point. Is there any way you can refine your argument? For example, you could argue that surveillance is intrusive and does more harm than good. Or you could argue the opposite and state that surveillance is good and necessary because it protects us from things like terrorism and crime. From there, you should have a better idea of how to start your essay and create a thesis.

  • sara99

    I’m writing an argumentative essay about proper starting age of schooling but I don’t know how to start the introduction.

    • Have you chosen the proper age that you want to argue for? That will determine how you approach your introduction. Right now there is a lot of research arguing in favor of starting kids’ education in preschool around age 3 (http://works.bepress.com/william_barnett/3/). Maybe you could start by pointing out some statistics that show higher rates of success for people who began their education early (that is, if you can find good statistics like that from a credible source). Good luck!

  • evelyn

    I’m writing about the advantages of same sex shools and have no idea how to start it..

  • Rhys Mcrae-Mckee

    Naomi, thanks for the tips. I am actually an English teacher currently working with a group of grade 9 students. We are working on persuasive essays, and they just cannot seem to understand the hook sentence. I’ve tried multiple approaches, explained the different types of hooks that are commonly used, gone through steps with them (similar to yours)… I am running out of tricks! Since they can’t grasp the hook, it muddles them for the rest of their piece. Help!!!

    • Hi Rhys,

      It sounds like you have to find a comparison that they can relate to.

      Have you talked about hooks in music? (Mentioned in this post) Maybe you could ask your students for their favorite songs and talk about the hooks and what makes those memorable and then apply that concept to essay writing.

      Or you could venture into social media analogies…9th graders are probably mostly using Snapchat which is picture heavy (oh this analogy would be so much easier if 9th graders were on Twitter lol), but maybe have them imagine how they could get a friend’s attention if they only had one or two sentences to do so and then apply that concept to essay writing.

      Orrr…. you could use their favorite movies, look at the opening scene of one or two of them (ones with really good intros) and talk about how this scene piques interest and sets the stage for the rest of the movie… and then… you guessed it… apply that concept to essay writing.

      English teachers rule! Thanks for doing the work you do.

      Naomi

  • Katerina Howell

    Hello! I am writing an argumentative essay on whether or not the government should have the right to quarantine people during an outbreak. I decided that they should be able to quarantine people who pose a threat to public health, but I am not sure how to start my essay in a way that will capture the reader’s attention. Any ideas would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

    • Hi there–you could start by instilling a little fear in your reader. Pick a rapidly spreading disease and write a couple punchy lines about how quickly and by what method this disease can spread. Make sure you do your research to get the facts right and then turn it into a vivid scenario. Good luck!

  • Jay-arr Lebato

    good day i want to right an argumentative essay about death penalty. can you give example of a hook sentences that matters death penalty? thanks……

  • Rockiee Karmacharya

    hello.. I am writing about a persuasive essay on medical marijuana and i am not sure how to start. Can you please give me some suggestions?

    • Hi Rockiee,

      Where you start will depend on what stance you are taking. If you are arguing FOR medical marijuana you could write a brief anecdote about a person whose use of mm helped them to ease their symptoms, or you could start with an interesting statistic about the helpfulness of mm for relieving pain as compared to other types of pain relievers. If you are arguing AGAINST medical marijuana, you could start with an opposing story (maybe someone who turned to mm and ended up developing substance use related problems) or an opposing statistic.

      Good luck!

  • Alycia Smith

    I am writing an essay on poverty and education. Any ideas on a hook ?

  • Jodie

    Hi. Naomi
    This is my first argumentive essay. ” Managers can make employees satisfied”
    I agree with this statement. What would be a good hook to start?
    Regards
    Jodie

    • You could start with a fun anecdote that goes something like: Who would you want to work for? Manager A who does all these annoying, terrible, and belittling things, or Manager B who does all these supportive and encouraging things?

      Obviously, you would want to be more specific when setting up these “managers” and their behaviors; the point is to paint a picture of how much a manager impacts the employees feelings of satisfaction.

      Good luck!

      • Jodie

        Thank you so much Naomi and hi from Tasmania, Australia ?

        • You’re welcome, Jodie. Hi from Berkeley, California 🙂

  • Evallys Herrera

    Hello Naomi, I’m writing an argumentative essay that’s suppose to answer the question “Is it more difficult for women to be taken seriously than men?” I say yes it is harder for women. Any ideas for a hook? Thanks so very much!

    • Hi Evallys,

      I would start with an anecdote for this one, recounting an experience where a woman felt minimized in the workplace. For example, “At a meeting at the board of directors, Shelly Walters the COO of C-corp took out a pen to jot down a few notes for herself, when Larry Thomson, a shareholder, turned to her and said, ‘great, please make sure your notes are thorough and email them to me.’ Thomson assumed that since she was the only woman in the room that she should record the minutes rather than actively contributing to the meeting.”

      Obviously that’s just one kind of example, but I hope you see what I mean!

  • How you start will depend on what stance you are taking.

    If you are you arguing in favor of paying students for good grades, you could open with an emotional statement about how hard kids work in school for zero tangible rewards and that earning money can make this effort seem worthwhile. If you are arguing against, you could start with statistics from studies like this one (http://www.mitpressjournals.org/doi/abs/10.1162/REST_a_00217#.VwU2yBMrJyo) that show that the improvements that students achieve in grades as a result of getting paid are actually pretty minimal.

    Good luck!

  • Hi there–
    I would put your readers right in the middle of one of those moments in softball where a player is using all of their athleticism to accomplish a feat. For example that moment when you are trying to outrun the ball and slide into first base, or that moment when you are jumping just to the limit of your reach to catch a fly ball and get an out. The more visceral the better.

    Good luck!

  • Hi Shanda–I think you might find some help in this blog post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-start-a-narrative-essay/

    My suggestion would be to start with an anecdote about the terrifying day you found out your mom was diagnosed with cancer, or perhaps with a setting, bringing the reader in to spend a day in the life of the young you dealing with a mother who is not well. Pull at the emotions of your reader!

    Good luck!

  • Vino Gowan

    hi im writting argumentative essay about pressure of being a university student, any suggestion on that?

    • You could open with a vivid description of one of those crazy nights when you have a Chem test in the morning that you really should review, but you just got off of work from Chipotle and your hair smells an awful lot like beans and rice (and let’s be honest that $10/hour is hardly going to put a dent in your student expenses), and you still need to write your History paper on the Huns and Romans… you look at the clock and it’s already 11:45PM and your alarm is set for 7AM tomorrow… ACK! 🙂

  • Megan McArthur

    I am writing a essay on African American women’s hair and I’m having trouble with the hook sentence

    • To help you with this, I’d need to know a little bit more about the angle you are taking on this paper. As it stands right now, you could go in 101 different directions.

  • Hannah Ball

    Hello, I loved your blog post by the way! I am writing a speech on the nature of joy and I am struggling with thinking of a hook. Do you have any suggestions?

    • Ohh that’s a tough one. I might start out with a story of something that brings great joy and try to capture what that feeling feels like. Just thinking about it gives me the feels!

  • Fairuz Kzaman

    Hi Naomi! I love this post 🙂 Im going to give a persuasive speech on students should not bring handphone to school, do u have any great suggestions on the hook I should start with? Thank you so much

    • Hi Fairuz–hopefully I’m not too late to respond! First, thanks for the kind words. Happy you like it.

      I think you could really set the scene for how headphones isolate students from the world they are in right at the moment. How many things are these students missing out on by having their brains distracted by whatever they’re listening to in their headphones? Is there a specific story you could tell about yourself or someone you know?

      You could even start your speech with headphones in. Walk up to the front of the room, listening to your music, take your earbud out and say, “Oh, why is everyone looking at me?” Or something silly to demonstrate how you aren’t truly present when wearing your headphones. This of course would depend on the formality of the classroom and your personal level of comfort with performance.

      Have fun!

      • Fairuz Kzaman

        OMG that is so brilliant! Thank you so much Naomi! Really appreciate it :)))

        • Haha! Glad you like it. Let me know how it turns out. 🙂

          • Fairuz Kzaman

            Sure 🙂

  • Breanna Harris

    Hi my topic is about child care and I am arguing why the government agencies should visit the child care facilities , I am having a little trouble coming up with a hook to start off with my essay

    • You could go for an emotional hook here. Talk about a child care facility that really isn’t up to par. Set the scene for how bad it can get without any type of outside regulation. Paint a scary and bleak picture and then counteract it with the hope that your solution offers for improving these facilities.

      Good luck!

  • Hi there–I agree! My dog is 100% my family.

    One fun hook would be to start out with a personification of a dog; the trick is, don’t reveal that it’s a dog for a few sentences. For example, “When you first meet Oscar, he’s pretty shy for a three-year-old. Loud noises scare him and he’s super picky about what he eats. But he has these big brown eyes that you can’t help but fall in love with and he somehow knows how to make you feel like you’re the most special person in the whole wide world. My family adopted Oscar last year from the Animal House Animal Shelter…” 😛

    This is just a quick draft, but do you see what I’m going for? Have fun with it!

  • Ilham Hassan

    I need help starting off a hook for my Argumentative Essay. It’s about the Holocaust being taught in school, I need a hook. Any suggestions?

    • I’m going to assume that you are taking the side for the holocaust being taught in school. A good idea would be to start by telling an emotional story of a holocaust survivor and then segue into how this story should never be forgotten because of the lessons for humanity that it holds.

  • Kim Watts-Hailey

    Im righting an argumentative essay about the media programming us to fear American life. how they promote a world that is cold, heartless, violent and corrupt.
    i need a good hook.

    • A great hook would be to line up 3 or 4 real life news headlines that are intended to inspire these feelings.

  • Hi Brandon,

    First you need to pick a side. Do you agree or disagree with this sentiment? Your hook and thesis statement will definitely depend on your stance.

    For example, if you decide you agree with this statement, then you will want to start by humanizing one of these terrorists. Maybe open with a backstory on one of them to remind us that he is only human.

    If you decide you disagree, you could start with a description of one of the heinous acts of terrorism committed.

    Either way, I think going for an emotional hook here would be the best play.

    Good luck!

  • Hitler said some pretty preposterous things that somehow motivated his followers. You could start with one of his famous quotes (a quick Google search will lead you to some gems) that really sums up the rhetoric, which you can probably see being used in other hate groups as well. https://www.google.com/search?q=famous+hitler+quotes&oq=famous+hitler+&aqs=chrome.0.0j69i57j0l4.1887j0j4&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8

  • Victor

    Hi, Im writing an argumentative essay and the topic is “The role of designer in the inner city development”. Im trying to talk about “more green spaces in the city”.

    Can you help me to write a good hook sentence for it?

  • ANNA LAYNE

    I need a hook for an essay about why violent video games are bad for teens and I don’t know what to do. Will anyone help please? Thanks!

  • sara

    Hi Tepper! Thank you so so much for this post. It really does make a great inpact. I am going to talk about animal cruelty (in 40 min), and it is a really important argumentative speech (sorry for my english). I have hard time thinking about the hook.. What I have been thinking of so far is:

    Many ranchers or farmers, use electrocution, which fries the animal inside out, similar to being cooked in a microwave, due to fact that it is the cheapest way to kill animals. Some farmers also inject insecticides into the chests of minks. It takes several minutes for the minks to die a painful death. This is just one example of the reality that animal cruelty is based on. So..Why should animals have rights?

    Is it correct..?

    • Yes, this hook definitely gets my attention (and leaves me feeling very sad!)

  • Puneet Agarwal

    It’s a wonderful post. Very helpful !!! Thanks to the writer 🙂

    • And thank you for reading and for your kind comment. 🙂

  • Puneet Agarwal

    Wonderful post..Very helpful. Thanks to the writer!!!

  • Awesome Stuff. Bula from Fiji! 🙂

  • Violet

    Hi Naomi, What a great article, thank you so much..
    I am writing an essay based on an interview with someone to answer the question if this person is entrepreneur or not within a theoretical framework.

    Our lecturer like creative and crazy ideas, and i am confused how start a hook .. any help?

    • Hi Violet,

      Thanks for the comment! Appreciate you reading.

      You know what I think of when I think of interesting interviews? Rolling Stone. They usually start with a hook that gives an intriguing glympse at the person who they interviewed–sometimes it’s a surprising conclusion. I would take a clue from that style and try it out on your paper. Here’s a good one: http://www.rollingstone.com/music/news/bob-dylan-talks-a-raw-and-extensive-first-rolling-stone-interview-19691129 (and Google “best Rolling Stone interviews” to get more examples.)

      Now, I know that you aren’t interviewing people who are just innately interesting for this project (like Bob Dylan), but I would hope that you found out *something about your subjects during the interview that could help you create a similar, enticing hook. The idea is to give just a little bit away in the hook, but not the whole story.

      Good luck!

  • Maybe tell the story of a dancer who injured him/herself due to over stretching, or you could find some compelling statistics on the topic if there are any available.

  • Bob

    I am writing a research paper on the history of cars but im struggling on a good hook any help

    • I wonder if there is any way you can bring to life the awe an excitement people felt when they first began to see cars on the roads. I imagine it’s similar to how I feel when I see a functional robot doing amazing humanlike things. If you could bring that feeling to life, you would have a pretty catchy hook.

  • cla

    hey I’m writing an essay on the increase of obesity in Canada and the factors that lead to the increase but I’m stuck on a hook. I used a stat in my drasft but my teacher didn’t like it

    • Bummer because a stat would be the perfect choice for this type of essay. Did your teacher not like the stat because he doesn’t like stats as hooks? Or was it because the stat wasn’t interesting/compelling. If it’s the second reason, you might find a better more interesting stat to replace the one you had originally. You also need to make sure it comes from a valid source and not just some random website.

      If a stat just wont’ do, you could decide to write an attention grabbing question or fact about the consequences of obesity. You might find this post helpful to give you more ideas: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-start-an-essay/ and more specifically: http://www.obesitynetwork.ca/obesity-in-canada

  • Elaine Sparks

    Very helpful. Thank you.

  • Kay

    Hi i am writing about gastric ulcers and how they are due to bacteria H.pylori which is caused by contaminated water. However I don’t know how to start the hook any help?

    • My answer depends on how formal the essay is going to be. If you are writing a scientific, formal document, a good hook would be a surprising statistic on this subject. For example how many people are affected by this problem each year? Make sure your stat is from a credible source.

      If this is a more relaxed essay, perhaps to inform laymen about this problem, then a graphic description of what these gastric ulcers are and what they do could make a compelling hook.

      Thanks for your comment!
      Naomi

  • Emily Isabel

    Hi, I have to write a persuasive speech for my English class with the goal of convincing district administration that my high school needs to implement literature circles/book discussion as well as time for reading for pleasure into the English curriculum, because students in my school are not given nearly enough time to read literature (especially that which they enjoy). I need to convey that reading is a highly beneficial activity, contributing to increased cognitive abilities, that students who enjoy reading feel they don’t get to do enough of it, and that students who do not read often fall behind in mental development. I’m not sure what type of hook to use. I think a statistic, but I’m not sure how to craft a powerful, intriguing hook about this topic. Any ideas?

    • One potentially gripping hook would be to tell a short, true story about a kid whose life changed for the better thanks to reading. I know that there are tons of stories like that out there, I just chatted with a student about this very thing last week. Do you know anyone who this is true for?

      • Emily Isabel

        Thanks so much for the suggestion, I do have a good story to use!

  • Cailyn

    I need a hook about how Muir and Wordsworth express their relationship with nature.

  • Ezra15s

    i have to compare and contrast Mayan, Incan and Aztec Empires to Mississippi valley tribes on the eve before european settlers. how can i start a hook sentence

    • A great hook would be to start with a sentence or two on a singular social custom that any of these peoples participated in that is in stark contrast to European customs, the more fascinating the better!

  • Nduduzo

    I am writing an argumentative essay about “which school i would prefer” can you please help me with a hook.

  • A quote from the novel that illustrates how women are portrayed would be a great way to start out. I would be sure to choose a quotation that reflects the argument you’re going to make in your thesis — the more surprising or shocking, the better. Good luck!

  • Phạm Thị Thúy Hằng

    Hi :)) thank you for this effective post :))
    Im going to write my personal essay telling a story about how I became hard working after a study failure. This failure directly linked to my personal background ( my parents divorced, my mom had to earn a lot of money to pay the tuition fee, but i wasted it by having failed the English course => after this i realized that being diligent is very important). Doyou have any suggestion about how I can start my essay with a hook?
    Thank you very much :))

    • Hi Pham,

      Since your whole essay is going to center on your story, one strategy that could be great here is to start in the middle of your story — the moment you realized that you were failing. Here’s an example of what I mean: “At the moment I glanced at my pile of forgotten homework and turned back to the television, I realized that things weren’t going as planned.”

      Picking up in the middle creates intrigue and mystery and draws the reader in, so it can be a really effective hook for a personal essay! Happy writing 🙂

      – Erin

  • Matthew Clemence

    I am writing a persuasive essay on “why video games are good for you”. I need help with a hook

    • Hi Matthew,

      I think that a surprising statistic would work great with your angle on the topic. Perhaps you can take one of your reasons/main ideas and look for a statistic that supports that, such as “People who play video games are X% more likely to Y.” A short yet surprising anecdote (a story about someone whose life was improved by gaming) could also work here.

      Happy writing!

      Erin

  • You could share a short “horror story” about the perils of not finishing a task, either a story from your own experience or someone that you know. Then, your essay will help to show how that crisis could have been avoided by implementing your chosen habit.

  • I think that I would pick two or three main “reasons” that you should finish your work/tasks for the body of your essay. For instance, maybe you could focus on the fact that doing so relieves stress (because you’re not worrying about what’s left unfinished), reduces mistakes (because you don’t forget important steps of the tasks or rush the job), and leaves you more free time (because you aren’t playing catch up).

    Happy writing!

  • You might consider using the “paint a picture” strategy here, especially if you’re focusing on your physical environment — you would describe the environment in great detail so that the reader can imagine it. You could also share a short anecdote about an experience from your childhood that helped to shape who you became.

  • One way you could start off your paper is by describing yourself in the middle of achieving one of your life’s goals — a nice, detailed description of your cushy office or reaching the peak of Mt. Everest or whatever your goals may be — and then you can use that as a launching pad for describing what your goals are and how you hope to make them a reality.

  • Ruby Gao

    I’m writing an argumentative essay on why Creon is the tragic hero of Sophocles’ Antigone. Any ideas for a creative hook?

    • For a literary analysis, I think that a quote is a great way to go — see if you can find something that “sums up” Creon’s character (and/or flaws) — this will help to set the tone for your essay. A quote from a third party about heroism (or tragic heroism, in particular) could also work here.

  • Travis Mendiola

    So I’m writing an argumentative essay on if the U.S. ARMY is professional organization or not. I’m having a trouble trying to come up with a good hook.

    • Hi Travis,

      You might start with a surprising statistic for this one: for instance, if you could find out what percentage of enlisted Army members are “professionals” in some capacity or receive “professional” training. (This, of course, only works if you’re arguing that the Army is indeed a professional organization!)

      Another angle that could work is to describe ‘a day in the life’ of a specific person in the Army in detail, but without stating outright that the person is in the Army — then you could reveal that fact later on. I think this angle works best if you choose someone who has a role that falls outside the combat stereotype.

      I hope this helps you start off on the right foot. Happy writing!

      Best,
      Erin

  • Thisisit

    next time get to the fucking point

  • Mukhtr

    I am writing about why i choose Finace in terms of joh.what kind of hook can i use?

    • I can see a couple of possibilities here! If there was a specific experience that sparked your interest in finance — maybe the first time you earned money or visited a bank — you could definitely start by describing that experience.

      Another good way to start an essay is by breaking down a stereotype. For instance, some people might not think that finance is very exciting; you could change this perception by describing the most money you’ve ever handled/managed in one day (if that’s an impressive number!).

  • Mukhtr

    Job

  • xoalieyaaa

    I am writing an essay about how one’s culture views others of the world and I can’t think of how to start it off with a good hook.

    • One interesting way to start this paper might be by describing a cultural view or tradition that may seem strange or surprising but is very normal/traditional to the members of that culture — that would be a good idea to lead into how cultures differ and how we see them through the lens of our own culture.

  • For your hook, you might consider a stirring/interesting quote from the book (or the movie). Another approach would be to start with a quote/line of dialogue that appears in the movie, but not the book — this could be an interesting lead-in to a discussion of how the two differ overall.

    As for your thesis statement, have you tried our Thesis Builder? You can use this tool to create a compare-and-contrast thesis: https://www.kibin.com/thesis-builder/type

    I’d also recommend this post, because it contains some great thesis advice for compare and contrast essays: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-compare-and-contrast-essay/

    Happy writing!

  • rachele

    Hey do you have to weave your own words into the hook quote?

    • Hi there– yes, I find that using your own words to support a hook quote can make the quote flow in your essay a little bit better.

      For example I might write:

      President Barack Obama once joked, “In my first term, we passed health care reform. In my second term, I guess I’ll pass it again.” This may be funny, but for millions of Americans without access to medical services, health care reform is no laughing matter.

      This is a lot less jarring then something like:

      “In my first term, we passed health care reform. In my second term, I guess I’ll pass it again.” — President Barack Obama. This may be funny, but for millions of Americans without access to medical services, health care reform is no laughing matter.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Trevor

    I’m writing an argumentative essay on how does immigration change America and how does America change those who come here. However, I have no idea for a hook or a thesis. Any Ideas?

  • Bria

    Analysis essay with thesis on the Ikea commercial “Lamp” directed by Spike Jonez. I feel like a blind mouse. I have write my little heart out, but to structure as an analysis thesis I feel lost!

  • hughes_anna

    I’m writing an essay about Piggy in Lord of the Flies and the savagery found in human nature. Any suggestions on a hook sentence?

    • Hi Anna-
      A quote from the novel that exemplifies this notion of savagery could be your best hook. Or you might find an anecdote from real life about the so-called savagery of middle schoolers (a story about school bullying for example) and then relate it back to your thesis. Here is a helpful post on writing your Lord of the Flies Essay: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/lord-of-the-flies-symbolism/

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Jes Sica

    awesome post. I’m writing a compare/contrast essay on renting vs buying a home. what is a good hook sentence?

    • An interesting/shocking statistic or fact could work here very well. For example, “While common wisdom states that owning is better than renting, it turns out that on average home values only keep pace with inflation and you’re better off investing your hard earned money in the stock market.” Make sure you choose a reputable source for your stat! Here’s a cool article I found on the topic: http://affordanything.com/2015/11/24/is-renting-better-than-buying-should-i-rent-or-buy/ (but you’ll want to investigate whether it’s a reliable source 🙂

      Good luck!

      • Jes Sica

        This was very helpful. Thanks so much

  • Hard to say given that I don’t know what your handouts cover. However, maybe you could start with a quote from one of them (if it’s interesting enough), or an interesting fact or shocking statistic related to your topic.

  • A1515

    What’s the best hook for a reflective essay about a article?

  • Leslie

    good evening Naomi, can you start a hook with a question?

    • Yes, absolutely. That’s a great format for a hook, especially if the question is a compelling one.

      • Leslie

        ok, thank you very much!

  • A person

    Can you tell me a good hook on golf?

    • Golf is a pretty broad topic so your hook will really depend on the angle of your paper. For example, if you are writing about a specific professional golfer, you could start with an interesting fact about his background “Jack Nicklaus’s first job was as a dishwasher… ” (NOT true, just an example). Or if you’re writing about the logistics of the sport, you might start with an interesting stat about golf scores. Or if it’s a narrative style essay, maybe you can bring your reader into the the scene of how it feels to be standing on a golf course at the moment before you’re about to swing your club.

      Good luck!

  • josiah oates

    i don’t understand how to make it for an school essay.
    PLEASE HELP!!!

    • Hi Josiah– the point of the essay hook is to grab your reader’s attention right from the beginning. What type of hook you use will largely depend on the type of essay you are writing about and your specific topic. Some typical hooks include: an interesting or shocking statistic related to your topic, an anecdote or story (this works especially well for narrative essays), a relevant and thought provoking quote, and an intriguing question.

      Good luck!

  • NEED HELP

    Hi miss naomi! My teacher give us a task to write an argumentative essay about global solidarity, can you help me with my intoduction or hook? i really dont know how to do it… 🙁

  • Mohanna

    what kind of hook should I use for TOEFL IBT specially that the audience are captive by default hehehehehe.
    can you give me an example of hook sentence example for comparing question?

    • Hi Mohanna,
      Good point about a captive audience, but it’s also great practice getting a captive audience hooked on your writing. It will be useful when it comes time to write admissions essays or reports for your future boss or many other possible captive audiences ahead.

      All that said, I’m happy to see you’re still taking your hook sentence seriously!

      Without an idea of what the topic of those questions are, it’s hard for me to give specific advice on a hook sentence. However, you can choose the format that best fits the topic. This could be a shocking statistic, an interesting quote, a short anecdote, or a fascinating fact among other possibilities. Whichever format best complements the topic is the one you should go with.

      Cheers!

  • I’m not exactly sure what angle you are taking on this topic and that could change the hook you choose dramatically. However, an interesting fact about archetypal symbols could be your route here. For example, what is an example of a ubiquitous symbol that most of us take for granted but that is also extremely meaningful?

  • Hi Greta,

    I think a brief personal anecdote that highlights one of your strengths or weaknesses would be perfect for this type of essay. Perhaps you could write about a time that you made a mistake (or one in which you saved the day!) and could use that to lead into a broader discussion of your strengths and weaknesses.

    For example, I might start with “As the proctor announced that it was time to move to the next section of the SAT, I realized with horror that I skipped two entire pages of math problems.” (An unfortunately true story…)

    I hope that gives you some ideas!

    Erin

  • Budoor Gold

    Can you help me to write a hook of an argument form regulation attire and wearing what you want

    • Hi Budoor,

      I can think of a couple of good approaches here. If you’re against regulating attire (such as mandatory uniforms), then a quote about the importance of self-expression could be a great way to start your essay. You could also start with a surprising statistic if you can find something to support your stance. For instance, a statistic stating that uniforms aren’t effective in controlling behavior in public schools would be an interesting way to support your idea that you should be able to wear what you want.

      I hope those ideas get you started!

      Best,
      Erin

  • Connor

    do you know how to write a hook to start a paragragh about a character’s traits?

    • Hi Connor,

      I think an interesting quote would be a great way to go here, either a quote from the character him/herself or the author’s description of the character. You could then use this quote to lead into a general discussion of the character’s traits, and then your (more specific) thesis.

      Happy writing!
      Erin

  • sultan Akram

    hi, i am writing essay on good governance. how to start hook please some suggestions

    • Perhaps you could start with a short anecdote that gives a great example of good governance on a national or local level (depending upon the purpose of your paper).

  • Aquarius

    I’m trying to write an application to this high school… and I don’t know how to start my “what are your special talents, awards, interests or achievements about which you are most proud. What have you learned about yourself as a result of these experiences?” I have everything planned out for the body paragraphs but I don’t know how to write the hook for it… Could you help me with this please? Thank you in advance 🙂

    • For a personal narrative, an effective hook is to start right in the middle of a story that illustrates your special talents/awards…(whichever you are focusing on in your essay).

      For example, I might start with the moment that I proudly stood to receive my most improved swimmer award while reflecting on how only six months ago, I couldn’t swim at all. It would look like this:

      “Six months ago, I was terrified of water and couldn’t swim to save my life, and here I was accepting the most improved swimmer award at the annual swim team banquet.”

      You see? Show your story from the beginning and you’ll have your reader hooked.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • tala

    wanna start an essay about moving to another country and feeling homesick but i cant find a way that is catchy any suggestions?

    • Hi Tala–
      I would suggest dropping your reader into one of those moments of homesickness. If you’re writing in first-person then it would be very easy to do this. “I looked down at my bowl of Ramen noodles and felt my heart twisting into knots, and a tear slipped down my cheek. It was Thanksgiving back at home, and at that moment I wanted my mom’s homemade mashed potatoes more than anything in the world.”

      I just made that up, but I hope you understand what I mean! Pick a scene where you have felt and experienced homesickness and bring it to life as your hook.

      Happy writing!

  • Sara

    Hi I am writing about business culture and being a foreigner can you give me some ideas
    thank you

    • If you’re asking for ideas on a good hook, this topic seems conducive to starting with an anecdote or brief story. Drop your reader right into the middle of a story about how being a foreigner has created misinterpretations or mixups in business culture. Can you start with an interesting situation where something got literally or figuratively “lost in translation”?

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Ali-Mohamed Adam

    Hey.

    I’m writing an comparative essay which requires me to compare and give an analysis based on the aspects of two different novels.

    Aspects like these include: Literary devices, setting, characterization, context & point of view.

    I also have to relate this to how these aspects have expressed human behavior.

    Any chance you could help me?

  • Ann Nguyen

    I’m writing an argumentative essay on the uselessness of gun control. Can you give me some suggestions on how to write my hook?

    • Hi Ann,

      Since this is such a controversial topic, you might want to start your paper with a “bold statement” style hook. This is a statement or an opinion that arouses an opinion or response from your reader. For example you could say “If all gun control laws were abolished, the world would be a safer place.”

      See how that’s bold and would definitely cause a reader to react?

      Best,
      Naomi

  • zackary keller

    Hey, I am writing a argumentative essay for my English class but I am stuck on the hook. Are there any tips you have that could help?

    • Hi Zackary,
      I suggest you sign up for the 14 hook sentences examples using the little slider box at the bottom right corner of this webpage. There are many different directions you can go, but it really depends on the content and tone of your paper.
      Can you make a bold statement? Provide a shocking statistic? Start with a compelling quote? Or maybe recount an interesting anecdote?
      These are just a few options.

      Best,
      Naomi

      • zackary keller

        Thank you so much Naomi, this help me a lot.

  • tiffany feng

    I’m writing an essay on how the Shakespearean society led to the deaths of Romeo and Juliet and I’m having trouble thinking of a hook. Any suggestions?

  • Hi Lia,

    How about starting with a bold statement? That is statement or assertion that arouses an opinion or response from your reader. For example, you could say something like, “Paying college athletes is a proven formula for poor academic performance and a decrease in sports performance.”

    Now, a statement that BIG would make some readers go, “what? why? I disagree!” and then they’re hooked. You of course need to back any big statement up with the evidence from your research (although you don’t need to substantiate it right away in your first paragraph.) Usually this evidence will come to light as you present your thesis statement and then break it down and support it with your sources. (By the way, I made that statement up… I have no research to back it. I’m just trying to demonstrate a point here.)

    Happy writing!
    Naomi

  • Tatiana Rivera

    Hello ☺. I’m writing an argumentative essay on why Chocolate Milk tastes better than Strawberry Milk (I know, a little ridiculous, but it’s whatever) and i’m having trouble writing the hook sentence. I would really appreciate the help.

    • Hi Tatiana,

      That sounds like a fun one. For some reason I got a memory of that sensation I get when I think I’m about to drink orange juice and instead I take a swig of milk. If your essay is in first / second person (as I imagine this essay might be), you could start with a funny little story about chocolate milk.

      For example: “Have you ever gone to take a sip of what you thought was soda or juice only to find out it was milk? Blech! This is exactly how I feel when I think I’m about to drink chocolate milk but end up with a mouthful of strawberry milk. Disappointing.”

      If your essay is going to be more formal than something like that, maybe you could start with an interesting stat or fact about chocolate milk (or strawberry milk) . How about this one? http://www.zmescience.com/medicine/nutrition-medicine/milk-school-program-16012015/ “Students drank 41% less milk when chocolate milk was removed from school menus. Why? Because chocolate milk is just that awesome.” (Okay I’m drifting into being casual again… I think it’s your topic).

      Hope that gives you some ideas!

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Penelope

    Hi im new here and just got this assignment from my 8th grade teacher on why should dogs be allowed in apartments?

    • Hi Penelope,

      That’s a fun topic. Are you trying to come up with a hook sentence? You might find some statistic on how many apartment buildings (in your town perhaps) don’t allow dogs.
      Or if that’s hard to find, maybe start with a big statement or statistic on the benefits of dog ownershp.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • jose

    what is good with people

  • jose

    i am writing about schools starting time can u plez help me

    • Hi Jose,
      Maybe you could start with a bold statement that leads your reader to form an opinion or a strong response.

      For example, “Schools that have start times earlier than 8AM are potentially damaging their student’s health and well-being.”

      Or, you might find an interesting fact or statistic about school start times. Here are a few: http://www.startschoollater.net/wake-up-calls-fast-facts.html

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Jana_rym

    i actaully enjoyed your post and forgot why the hell i came here as your writing style is addictive xD

    • Haha awesome! Thanks for reading and happy you enjoyed it.

      • Jana_rym

        as you are an expert i ask you to give me some guidence on how should i write an essay to answer this question : will the audio book be the only reading ? it is persuative one righ ? should i stand for one view and neglect the other or should i stand for one and refute the other !! am too cunfused !! save my sould please xD

        • Hi Jana–
          You might find this post about argumentative writing very helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/argumentative-essay-outline/

          It is very persuasive indeed to refute your opponent’s argument while also setting forth arguments in favor of your viewpoint. The blog post I link to gives you an idea of how to do exactly that.

          Best,
          Naomi

          • Jana_rym

            that’ was really helpfull ,thank you so much

      • Jana_rym

        just one more question . can the essay’s introduction end with a question ?

        • Typically your essay’s introduction will end with your thesis statement, but if you have a question that serves as the perfect transition to your next paragraph, then by all means use it. There is no hard and fast rule either way here (unless your teacher has specified otherwise, of course).

          • Jana_rym

            thank you very much .you really saved my life

          • Sweet! So happy to hear it.

  • Mimi

    I mostly have trouble with the intro and conclusion of a persuasive essay. I have my thesis ready and my body paragraphs are also ready too. But I can’t come up with a hook sentence for my intro on the dangers of social media on our society. Can u help me!!

    • Hi Mimi,
      Here are a few options for directions you could go on your hook sentence:
      1) Make a bold statement about the dangers of social media — something that would inspire your reader to respond. For example “Social media is more dangerous than a loaded gun…”
      2) Provide an interesting fact/statistic about the dangers of social media. For example “In 2015, X students attempted suicide because of social media bullying…”
      3) Start with a short story or anecdote. For example, “Laura didn’t realize that when she logged into her Instagram account that morning, that what she would find a message waiting for her that would prompt her to self harm. ‘You’re fat and ugly. Kill yourself.’ the message said. It wasn’t the first message like this…. ”

      Whatever you choose, make sure it fits with the style and tone of your essay. If you use a statistic or fact, make sure it comes from a reliable source. If it’s a short story/anecdote, make sure it’s authentic.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

      • Mimi

        I came up with this:
        As of 2016, suicide has replaced homicide as the second-leading cause of death among U.S. teenagers because of social media bullying.
        It’s for a classroom debate and I am in the bad side!

        • Hi Mimi,

          I think that would qualify as a bold statement and interesting fact all wrapped in one. I think you’re going to do great on this debate!

          Best,
          Naomi

          • Mimi

            Thank u sooo much! I feel much more confident now! Just a question though:
            How will I introduce the topic b/w the thesis and the hook sentence?

          • A typical format would go: 1. hook sentence, 2. background information, 3. thesis statement.

            The hook sentence is the first thing, followed by a brief bit of background information and context, followed by your thesis statement. Then, once you’ve completed your intro, you’ll move into defending your first point.

          • Mimi

            Should I say:
            Social media has taken a big toll on our society, one that affects millions of people around the globe? It’s like a description of the issue right?

          • Yes, you need a concise description of the issue that you’re about to debate. That works, but you might want to get even more specific if possible. Are you really talking about “people around the globe” or are you focusing on a particular group such as students?

          • Mimi

            Well, our topic was is it harmful to our society. Would that count as ‘people around the globe’? But I think ur right, focusing on students is a lot better and stronger.
            Best,
            Mimi

  • Ben R

    Hi. Im writing about the central theme of A Dolls House by Henrik Ibsen and cant think of a hook for my thesis. Help?

    • Hi Ben–
      Is there an interesting quote from the author or within the play that encapsulates the tone and goal of your analysis?

      If not that, then maybe a bold statement will work for you. Try saying something that is contrary to what other people have decided about this work (assuming it goes along with your argument). For example, “A Doll’s House did no favors for women or the future of women’s rights.”

      Hope either of those ideas sends you in a good direction here.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Seddik Jelouane

    I’m writing an argumentative essay, How can I start the hook? Is it important in formal writing??

    • Hi Seddik,

      Yes, opening your formal essay with a hook is a great way to leave a good first impression and get your instructor’s attention. If you haven’t downloaded the 14 types of hook sentences yet, I suggest you do so. Just sign up using the box at bottom right corner of the page, confirm your subscription, and you’ll get that PDF in your email right away.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • KawaiiTails :3

    I need a good hook sentence for my essay. I’m writing about avoiding the option of owning exotic animals as pets. Can you help?

    • You could start with a story of a person being hurt or killed as a result of keeping an exotic animal, or you could start with a sad story about an exotic animal who was harmed due to living in captivity. The idea is to immediately paint a vivid picture of the harmful results of keeping an exotic pet.

  • Stormin

    Ali beat Frazier in both fights. Your hook in your essay about hooks has false information

  • Leona Willis

    Hi Ms. Tepper!
    Thank you for sharing your tips in a captivating, organized manner! I am currently writing an expository essay explaining what MLK Jr. has taught about overcoming adversity. I downloaded your 14 types of hook sentences (which I found to be very helpful) and thought the most fitting would be

    #1: Advice, like a word of advice that MLK famously given because it does fall into “what MLK taught” pretty nicely,

    #8: Famous Quote. Now this one caught my attention because of the Gandhi quote you so coincidentally added in because I am supposed to “creatively include Gandhi’s ideas” in this essay and I figured the easiest way would be the intro or conclusion. Perhaps I could put a quote down pertaining to Gandhi’s beliefs in passive resistance and show how MLK based his ideas off Gandhi’s?

    Or, lastly, #11: A Rhetorical Question, maybe something that asks what the meaning of “All men are created equal” is or something to really emphasize the passion MLK had for African-American rights, but I feel like that may be slightly irrelevant.

    I couldn’t really call it a dilemma, for nothing is really shouting out at me, but I was wondering if you could please give some words of advice and maybe something would spark?

    Thank you for your time, Ms. Tepper!
    Leona

    • Hi Leona,

      It definitely sounds like any of those ideas could work for your assignment, but the idea of integrating a Gandhi quote in the introduction *really* stands out to me, especially since you need to include his ideas, too. That would be a seamless way to “introduce” him in an essay focusing on MLK without an awkward transition to his ideas later on. It also makes more sense to mention Gandhi in the intro than the conclusion since you generally should avoid new information in the final paragraph.

      I think you’re on the right track!

      Happy writing,
      Erin

      • Leona Willis

        Thank you very much for your help!

  • Your second hook is perfect! The question definitely makes me want to know more, and the description that follows is great. Definitely go with that one 🙂

  • Hi Ang,

    Starting an essay like this with a quote about clothes (“Clothes make the man”) or a song lyric about what someone is wearing (there are so many! Cake’s “Short Skirt Long Jacket” comes to mind) could be interesting.

    It could also be interesting to describe how putting on a single article of clothing — a dark hoodie, a hijab — can instantly alter perceptions of the wearer and the cultural assumptions that come along with that piece of clothing.

    A good old rhetorical question could be great, too: “Could a new suit change your life?”

    Happy writing!
    Erin

  • Hi Bailey,
    Maybe you could start by dropping the reader right into the middle of a scene of one of these movies. Burton’s films are so vivid, they could be really fun to try to replicate in writing!
    If that doesn’t seem to work… maybe find an interesting quote to play off of. Here are some ideas: http://www.beliefnet.com/entertainment/movies/galleries/surprisingly-inspiring-quotes-from-tim-burton-movies.aspx and https://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/keywords/tim_burton.html

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Amna

    For some reason i keep getting “There was an error with the AJAZ request:” message whenever I try to sign up to receive the 14 types of hook sentences + examples..

    • Oh no! I don’t know when that broke. I’ll try to fix it, but in the meantime, can you please email me at essayninja@kibin.com and I’ll get you that resource right away.

      • mount asgard

        Can i also email you directly? Because i cant see the ‘box at the bottom right of the screen”? I really need help with that…

        • Hi there,

          I’ve just made an update in the post so you can sign up for the example hook sentences again. Simply click one of the orange “Yes! Hook me up!” buttons in the body of the post to get that resource emailed to you.

          Thanks so much!
          Naomi

          • Cait

            i still haven’t got the email yet???? Ive checked my spam too but its not there.

          • Hi Caitlyn,

            I’m not seeing your email in the subscriber list. To get the resource you need to 1) enter your email 2) confirm your subscription by clicking the link in the email you’ll receive 3) then the resource will send once you’re confirmed.

            I suggest giving it another try and if you still don’t see it let me know!

            Naomi

          • Cait

            Hey Naomi,

            I used a different email. It’s the one with @eq.edu.au

          • Cait

            Never mind, I used my outlook email and it worked. 🙂

          • Oh good! I’m glad to hear it. 🙂

  • aubrey rongcales

    Hi! I a, writing an argumentative essay about the lowering of MACR, and I was wondering if you could help me with my hook sentence.. mine is “children are at risk of being detained in jail at the minimum age of nine years old”..

    • This is an impactful fact to be sure, but you might turn it into a better hook by actually starting with a two-three sentence story about an actual 9-year-old kid being held in jail (if you have access to any information like that you could use). That seems so tragic!

  • Alondra Ventura

    hi i’m writing an argumentative essay on whether or not there should be gmo labels on cans, and I have no clue what to write about. help?

    • Hi Alondra,

      First, you need to take a stance by answering the question: do you think products should include GMO labels?
      Why or why not?

      You might need to do a little bit of research before you pick a side.

      Once you’ve done your research and chosen a side, you’ll want to develop a thesis statement. I know that sounds intimidating, but here is an easy structure for you to follow:

      Canned products should (or should not) include GMO labels because REASON 1, REASON 2, REASON 3.

      An example reason that products should include GMO labels might be because it is the consumer’s right to know.

      Once you select your stance and your three reasons and have developed a good thesis statement, you are ready to write your paper! The rest of your paper will address each of the reasons for (or against) labeling with evidence from your research.

      I suggest you write your hook sentence last because then you’ll know what your paper is about and how to set up your reader.

      Hope this helps and happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Hi there–happy to help you with some hook ideas, but I’d need to know some specifics about the topic of your essay. Cheers!

  • Cait

    ah i need some help. I am trying to write an essay that has to persuade a panel of English teachers to use two poems i have chosen from the Elizabethan era. I dont know how to start it. On my draft i didn’t get good feedback on my intro. I need a great way to start it so i dont bore my teacher!! please help. The final is due in a week!!!!!

    • Hi Cait,

      Can you find anything surprising that the two poems have in common? I think you could find a surprising/unusual connection that would go a LoOooooOoong way to keeping your English teachers interested (a panel of English teachers? That sounds very intimidating.) Then you could start the intro with something like: “on the surface these two poems seem very different, but they actually share a common (theme/symbol/tone…whatever you can connect)”

      Then hopefully the teachers will say… “Oh really? Go on?”… and then you’ll put the connection together for them in your thesis statement, and the rest of the essay will be about proving that connection with evidence from the texts.

      Here is a helpful post about writing literary analysis: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-literary-analysis/

      I hope that gives you a good idea for where to take this!

      Naomi

  • kewal shrestha

    I am writing an argument on legalization of prostitution. I am not able to come up with narrower version of this topic which can have enough claims to make. I tried with legalization of prostitution in USA, but this one lacks enough claims. So, do you have better suggestions?

    • Hi Kewal,

      I think that the claims supporting the legalization of prostitution *anywhere* will mostly apply in the United States, too. Ultimately, to make an argumentative essay on this topic, you need at least two solid reasons for arguing in favor of legalization. (More are even better! But you can also use counterarguments to lengthen your paper). To make it US-specific, you could use statistics regarding prostitution in specific locations as evidence, or you could even refer to specific laws.

      I’d encourage you to check out https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/argumentative-essay/ for some more helpful advice (and a link to an outline, which will also help).

      Cheers!
      Erin

  • Annie

    HI Naomi, thank you very much for this post. May I please know if this sentence is a good hook for a proposoal? “On January 1st 2001 was the beginning of the 21st century, but before the 21st century began there were a lot of events that happened in the past decade. “.. I am doing a research paper and I need to write a proposal first. Thank you!

    • Hi Annie,

      Without knowing what you’re proposing, it’s hard to give you the best advice about a specific hook for your proposal. To tweak what you already have, I think an interesting hook would be to simply list some of the major events of the decade you’re describing (the ’90s, I presume?). So for instance, you might write something like this: “The Gulf War. The debut of the Internet. The Y2K frenzy. While 2001 marked the beginning of the 21st century, there were a lot of important events that happened in the decade prior.” Just an idea to chew on 😉

      Cheers!
      Erin

      • Annie

        ehy that’s awesome! I am writing a proposal for my research paper about the War of 1812. It’s kind of broad topic and I need to narrow it down, but right now I need to have a good hook sentence. :))

        • Well first, be sure to check out https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/ to narrow down that topic 🙂 The reason I say that is because your hook — if done right — is pretty topic-dependent. So if you’re focusing on, say, the soldiers in the War of 1812, then your hook would also focus on soldiers for instance.

          Since you’re writing a proposal, sharing something surprising that you’ve found in your research so far would be a nice way to kick this one off.

          • Annie

            awesome! Thank you very much for helping! I greatly appreciate your help <3 🙂

          • You’re very welcome! Good luck with your paper 🙂

  • bob

    hi.. i’m writing about advantages and disadvantages of capitalism. Can u give an idea to make a hook about this topic??

    • I think that a striking quote about capitalism (maybe something from famed economist Adam Smith) or a startling/surprising statistic would be a great way to kick off this essay.

  • I think a great hook for this one would be to share a surprising fact/statistic about college athletes, such as how much revenue a single athlete can generate for a college or university.

  • Pragyee Upadhyay

    hey! my essay is a compare and contrast on vegetarian and non-vegetarian diets. Can you suggest me a hook sentence?

    • Hi Pragyee,

      What if you started off with a mouth-watering description of a meal … only to reveal that it’s all vegetarian? (This would work best if you have an audience who is unfamiliar with and/or skeptical about vegetarian diets).

      Another way to argue in favor of vegetarianism from an environmental angle might be to discuss the environmental impact of meat (i.e. water needs for livestock) — a surprising fact or statistic would work well here.

      Lastly, you might go the “provocative question” route. The question you choose will depend on your audience and your argument, but you could start off with something like “Can you imagine never consuming another animal product in your life?” or, alternatively, “Can you imagine eating animal protein three times per day?”

      There are lots of possibilities with this topic 🙂 Happy writing!

      – Erin

  • Jeff Mars

    I need a hook saying Graffiti is Vandalism not art

    • Hey, Jeff!

      If you’re arguing that graffiti is vandalism and not art in your essay, then I think there are a few ways to go with your hook. The first thing that comes to mind is a quotation about art/what art is — this is a topic lots of people have expounded upon over the years, so I imagine it would be easy to find something.

      Another option is to go the vivid description route: you could write a detailed description of graffiti-covered buildings, for instance, to “set the stage” for your essay.

      Cheers!
      Erin

  • Lane

    Hi i need some help! Can u give me a good hook about using tablets over textbooks in education? Thanks 🙂

    • The first thing that comes to mind is how *heavy* all those textbooks are. You could start off with a description of a student’s aching shoulders and ripping backpack if you want to paint a vivid image of the problem.

      You might also start with a surprising statistic/fact, such as the amount of money spent on textbooks each year, or the number of textbooks that end up in landfills, or the number of back injuries treated due to heavy textbooks.

  • Chris The Cookie

    I’m planning on writing against dating sites and online dating. Any persuasive hook ideas?? Thanks.

    • I think a powerful hook for this essay might be an example of online dating gone wrong. If you’re writing a persuasive/argumentative essay, that automatically puts your readers in a position to consider your side of the argument.

  • You could start this essay with a fact/statistic that creates a sense of urgency: maybe a statistic that demonstrates just how common bullying is. Another approach would be to describe a specific bullying incident as a way to introduce your topic.

  • malika pardis

    Hi, I’m writing about Okonkwo being a perfect example of a tragic hero in the novel Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe. Can I have some help?

    • A good way to kick off this essay might be a quote from the book that exemplifies Okonkwo’s role as a tragic hero. Another option is to drop your reader right into a part of the book that demonstrates Okonkwo discovering his tragic flaw/weakness.

      Cheers!

  • Tamara Suarez

    hello, i would love if you could help me come up with a good hook for my essay. it about the Macbeth. im trying to make argument as to who is responsible for the killing of Duncan. Hope you’ve read the book!

  • Hi Claire,

    What if you started off with a vivid description of one of the nightmares? You could use a quote from the book, or you could describe it in your own words if there isn’t a quote that has a strong impact.

    Best,
    Erin

  • Carolina Pastrana

    very helpful!! thank you <3

  • What if you started with a good old rhetorical question for this one? The first thing that comes to my mind is something like this:

    Are fences intended to keep [something/someone] out, or to keep [something/someone] in?

    I’m not sure which noun is best there/what your essay will focus on, but you can replace the placeholders 🙂

  • Jewel Hill

    thanks for that information it was really very helpful