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"Your essay offers some good insights into the differences between the novel 1984 and the film adaptation. Some further work is needed, though.
There are multiple errors with punctuation and grammar (particularly tense -- you often switch back and forth between present and past tense). You should maintain double-spacing throughout (no single-spacing between paragraphs). Further, there are many issues with your citations. You do not cite the text or film at all, though these are your main sources. You should be referencing them frequently. In academic papers, all sentences that contain information from a source -- even if you are paraphrasing, not quoting directly -- need an in-text citation. You should also better incorporate your existing quotations. Direct quotes should be "smoothly built into a sentence, like this" (citation here) and not left to stand alone.
Lastly, both your introduction and conclusion are rather brief and your thesis is not concise. Work on refining/expanding your introduction and thesis, and then rewrite your conclusion accordingly. For more specific feedback and assistance, consider having your project edited."
Kibin. (2023). A comparison of george orwell's 1984 and michael anderson's film adaptation. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-comparison-of-george-orwells-1984-and-michael-andersons-film-adaptation-e1wG0nmG
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("A Comparison of George Orwell's 1984 and Michael Anderson's Film Adaptation.")
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