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A Creative Ending for the Story Priscilla and the Wimps

This is a creative writing piece where the author was tasked with writing an ending for the story "Priscilla and the Wimps."
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Jenn's feedback:

"You did a great job working through your essay and applying the feedback that was previously given. There are only few errors remaining. The text in your title should be properly MLA formatted. Consider combining the first two questions that Priscilla asks into one question so that the grammar is proper. When Melv asks about Monk, you use the word "say" when it should say "ask." In the phrase "I say bye to Priscilla," the word "bye" needs to be properly formatted in quotes. In the section where Melv talks to himself, sentences shouldn't start with the word "and" so that should be removed. The phrase "...down his red, puffy eyes." does not make sense when read because nothing really goes down eyes. The word "till" is not being properly used. The phrase "...distant memory of the past." sounds redundant. Consider rewording it. Other than these minor changes, everything looks really good."

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