A Critique of Thatched Cottages at Cordeville, a Painting by Vincent Van Gogh
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"The content of your essay demonstrates knowledgeability of the subject matter and you have a good grasp on language. Your descriptive sentences are sensory and detailed and your interpretations and observations are compelling. However, your paper needs to be edited for an inconsistent use of tense in the opening (switching between past and present tense), as well as some grammatical and punctuation errors, especially the tendency to hyphenate phrases that do not need a hyphen. For example, at the end of page 1, "small town" is two words, an adjective and a noun, which should not be hyphenated (unless the entire term were being used as a descriptor, as it is in your final paragraph with "small-town paradise"). Similarly, in the second paragraph on page 2, "real world" should not be hyphenated, and in your final paragraph, "point of view" should not be hyphenated. There are also some comma splices; two sentences which should be separate but instead are one sentence, joined with a comma. Addressing technical issues like these will lead to a strong, polished paper."
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