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"Your paper is off to an excellent start. It is very neatly formatted, an aspect of writing essential for reading comprehension and writing cohesiveness. The slight issues that are to be found with focus/purpose and content can be resolved when you improve the paper's organization. As written, the document does not have either a clear introduction or conclusion. An introduction should provide some basic background information about the topic you will be writing about and end with a thesis statement that communicates the goal of your paper and what you will write about to achieve it. The paper's content should then align with your thesis statement and fulfill the purpose of your essay. This will show the reader that you are focused on your goal throughout your writing. Last, the piece should end with a conclusion that summarizes the main points you made in the body of the paper and relates them to the thesis statement. Another thing that would improve the content of your essay is more clarity. While you have written a part that is specifically supposed to clarify something, as a reader, I did not feel like it did an adequate job. Last, there are some grammar and punctuation errors scattered throughout your writing. You can resolve many of these issues by subjecting your paper to a round of proofreading."
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Kibin. (2024). A discussion on immanuel kant's criticism of st. anselm's ontological argument for the existence of god. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-discussion-on-immanuel-kants-criticism-of-st-anselms-ontological-argument-for-the-existence-of-god-3WGbKeHU
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("A Discussion on Immanuel Kant's Criticism of St. Anselm's Ontological Argument for the Existence of God.")
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"A Discussion on Immanuel Kant's Criticism of St. Anselm's Ontological Argument for the Existence of God." Kibin, 2024, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-discussion-on-immanuel-kants-criticism-of-st-anselms-ontological-argument-for-the-existence-of-god-3WGbKeHU
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1. "A Discussion on Immanuel Kant's Criticism of St. Anselm's Ontological Argument for the Existence of God." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-discussion-on-immanuel-kants-criticism-of-st-anselms-ontological-argument-for-the-existence-of-god-3WGbKeHU.
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"A Discussion on Immanuel Kant's Criticism of St. Anselm's Ontological Argument for the Existence of God." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-discussion-on-immanuel-kants-criticism-of-st-anselms-ontological-argument-for-the-existence-of-god-3WGbKeHU.
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