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A Museum Critique of the Louvre and the Galleria

In this museum critique, a student describes the Louvre, specifically focusing on the Galleria and Egyptian exhibits.
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Christina's feedback:

"While you included some great details about the Louvre and Galleria in your critique, the overall lack of organization in your paper, in addition to the grammar and sentence structure errors, make it quite difficult to follow. To better organize your essay, consider how to break your paper down into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should have a clear thesis statement, letting the reader know what you will focus on for the rest of the paper. Your body paragraphs need to be separated by subject to ensure they are easier for the audience to process and follow. When you format your paragraphs, use indents so the reader can know when one paragraph ends and the next one begins. This piece needs significant editing prior to being turned in, so I'd recommend working with a peer, tutor, writing center, or other resource to assist with this."

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