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A Narrative of How I Spent My Summer Vacation in a Campsite

In this personal essay, the student narrates a disastrous camping trip. Though the student and her boyfriend were worried about the couple they planned the trip with, the real challenge proved to be the other campers, from a loud man in a cowboy hat to a heartbroken drunk.
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Bridget's feedback:

"You have a great eye for timing and detail, and the wry tone enhances the humor of the situation. This is a dynamic piece that is fun to read; however, frequent typos and errors end up marring the reading experience. Proofreading should help resolve this, and reading aloud can be a great tool to catch details in this task. In areas where you want to strike a conversational tone, do make sure the punctuation facilitates clarity and pacing. This is done well toward the end of para. 1, so make sure to take advantage of those tools when echoing natural speech patterns."

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