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A Personal Essay About Happiness Being One's Ultimate Goal

This is a personal essay about long-term goals. The student tells of the realization that happiness should be the end goal of any action or plan.
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This essay received a C by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
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Bob's feedback:

"The main point of your essay, that all of your goals and actions should lead back to your own happiness, is a great one to make, and the way you came to this realization is interesting. However, it takes you a long time to get to this idea. You could shorten the first two paragraphs significantly and still get your point across. While the paper as a whole gives some insight into your thought process, it is difficult to tell what message you are trying to get across. A strong conclusion that ties into the previous paragraphs would help in this regard. Finally, be sure to have the essay proofread as there are a significant number of grammar and syntax mistakes as well as awkward sentences and issues with focus."

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