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A Personal Narrative About Overcoming My Fear of Riding a Bicycle

This is a personal narrative about the author overcoming their fear of riding a bicycle. The student suggests that others should work to overcome their fears in a similar manner.
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Bob's feedback:

"This is a very relatable story, and a good example of overcoming an early fear. Since your main idea is overcoming that fear, consider starting off the paper by describing your uncertainty. You might mention that, although riding a bike without training wheels was something you wanted to do, the fear of injury threatened to hold you back. You could also expand on the role that training wheels played, and the mental and emotional effect that removing them had on you. This paper would benefit from a round of proofreading to address some awkward phrasing. Finally, consider expanding your conclusion to give some tips on overcoming common fears or reasons for doing so."

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