A Psychological Analysis of the Characters in the Movie Little Miss Sunshine

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"What a fascinating breakdown and analysis of the characters in Little Miss Sunshine! You do a good job focusing on the details of each character that help highlight the relevant psychological disorder and its effect. You also have great headings to lead the leaders through the different characters. However, a few essay components are missing or could be improved. First, you don't really have an introduction--while you provide background in the abstract, the abstract is meant to essentially be a summary of your paper as a whole (that means it should also contain info about the key takeaways). The sections about the characters should have a short intro leading into them that's separate from the abstract to set up the main idea and what you will cover. In addition, you introduce a ton of new info in the conclusion, which should ideally just be a summary and synthesis of information in your body paragraphs. You might consider having a section titled takeaways that details those aspects that is separate from your conclusion. You could also strengthen each paragraph about the characters by framing it around the disorder in the very first sentence (you do this well with Frank) and then making sure to return to that aspect in the final sentence of the paragraph to emphasize how what you just analyzed supports that character having the disorder. A few spots in individual paragraphs also shift to details about other characters without connecting them explicitly to the disorder and the character that the relevant section is about. Finally, throughout your paper, while the phrasing itself is in pretty great shape except for a few awkward spots (a slow read-through should help identify those areas), there are a significant number of sentence structure issues (run-ons, comma splices), comma errors, and ambiguous pronouns (make sure to follow APA rules for movie titles, too). Thus, doing a good proofreading to clean up those aspects will help make your good psychological analyses of the characters even stronger."

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