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"There is some really good imagery in this story and it is clearly imaginative. It takes a somewhat stream-of-consciousness approach, and that can be distracting and confusing to readers. It would be a good idea to create a chronological outline of the significant events in the story, then make sure each is explained with enough context. There are several points of confusion. Are these tribes of humans, or are these wolves one of the "tribes"? Where did the fire come from? Is the narrator human?
There is also a lot of repetition. Some unnecessary details are included, while other areas lack sufficient explanation. The third paragraph feels like it shifts in time, but it's unclear whether this is the case until the narrator mentions the possibility that the gnawing sound involves their parents. The shifts between past and present tense further compound this.
Consider having a peer read over the story to address any elements that may be unclear. There are also a number of errors involving spelling (site vs sight, for example), capitalization, and sentence structure that should be addressed."
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Kibin. (2025). A short story about a violent attack on a small village. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/a-short-story-about-a-violent-attack-on-a-small-village-3t9X12Px
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