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Advertising and the Environment: How to Find Balance

This persuasive paper describes the impact of constant advertisement on the environment. The writer focuses on the importance of thinking about the environment before spending money on items that create waste, are faulty, or otherwise have negative environmental impacts.
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Christina's feedback:

"Well done providing detailed information on how advertising impacts the environment. You mostly transition well from subject to subject; the biggest issue with organization is that you abruptly begin discussing the environment, when this receives a passing mention in your thesis statement. Your thesis would be stronger if you made the connection between advertising and environmental concerns more clear. Be mindful of introducing new information in the conclusion, too; usually, that paragraph sums up your ideas and leaves your reader with a takeaway. You do this, to be clear, but I'm afraid that your takeaway is buried a bit by wordiness and some information that would serve you better in your body paragraphs. You would also benefit from proofreading to clear up the issues of spelling, sentence structure, and word choice."

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