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Fun Facts About the North American Black Bear

This is an informative essay about the North American black bear. The author covers general information such as population, size, weight, color, and diet. The author mentions that the black bear is an omnivore that lives in forests and meadows. The black bear lives in Canada, but they are poached to sell parts to the Asian medicinal market illegally. The author also details the black bears' hibernation by discussing that hibernation is a metabolic, energy-saving process where bears sleep in a den while food sources are scarce.
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Jenn's feedback:

"You have done an excellent job with your paper and only need to put work into the paper's organization and the conventions to make a significant improvement. It is clear to the reader from the beginning that you are going to write about black bears, and you have a thesis statement that tells the reader what they can expect to read about. You then included a significant amount of factual information to inform the reader about black bears.

Regarding organization, the paper does not have a conclusion. Adding one allows you the opportunity to summarize the main points you made in the body of the document and relate those main points to your thesis statement. I would also suggest separating your introduction from the rest of the paper by making it a separate paragraph. In general, you should break your writing into more paragraphs. By doing this, you improve the clarity of the paper. Also, make sure that when you are using any information obtained from another text, you paraphrase as much of it as possible and use in-text citations to avoid plagiarism issues. Last, your bibliography should be left-aligned. Finally, there are extensive grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors throughout the paper. Consider doing a read-through of the document or have another set of eyes look at it to resolve these mistakes."

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