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Jenn's feedback:
"This paper is off to a good start, and with some effort put into all graded categories, you can significantly improve it.
The first place to start is with the organization of the paper. First off, you need to include a clear introduction. The introduction should provide a small amount of background information about the topic you will discuss and then end with a thesis statement that lets the reader know your paper's goal. The paper should then end with a conclusion that summarizes the main points made in the body of your essay and relate them to the thesis statement. Doing these two things will make it clear what the purpose of your paper is and communicate to the reader that you are focused on that purpose.
You have done an excellent job including such detailed content in your writing. One suggestion I have is that, when writing, you pretend you are writing to people who are not familiar with the topic. This may lead you to add more definitions to your paper so that more readers can understand what you are talking about. I also recommend including in-text citations in your report to avoid potential plagiarism issues.
Overall, the formatting of your paper is excellent. This is important because a neatly formatted paper improves reading comprehension and cohesion. A few problems I ran across are the formatting of your reference numbers, the spacing between paragraphs, and the overall format of your reference page.
Last, you have a reasonably good handle on conventions. There are places where sentence structure seems like an issue. Please have this paper go through a round of proofreading to catch those instances."
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(Kibin, 2024)
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Kibin. (2024). The nature of diamond and the role of its composition in determining qualities. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-analysis-of-the-nature-of-diamond-and-the-role-of-its-composition-in-determining-qualities-QU1MGIDJ
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("The Nature of Diamond and the Role of Its Composition in Determining Qualities.")
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"The Nature of Diamond and the Role of Its Composition in Determining Qualities." Kibin, 2024, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-analysis-of-the-nature-of-diamond-and-the-role-of-its-composition-in-determining-qualities-QU1MGIDJ
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1. "The Nature of Diamond and the Role of Its Composition in Determining Qualities." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-analysis-of-the-nature-of-diamond-and-the-role-of-its-composition-in-determining-qualities-QU1MGIDJ.
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"The Nature of Diamond and the Role of Its Composition in Determining Qualities." Kibin, 2024. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-analysis-of-the-nature-of-diamond-and-the-role-of-its-composition-in-determining-qualities-QU1MGIDJ.
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