An Argument against Gerard Jones's "Violent Media Is Good for Kids"
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"You make many valid points in your analysis, but since you're critiquing a specific piece of writing, you should name both the author of the article you're talking about and the title of the work itself. Also, take care to ensure you've got the author's name right. In this case, the author's first name is "Gerard" not "Gerald." Your in-text citations need some revision to better adhere to APA guidelines. A space should be inserted between a comma and the year of publication for a work. In addition, pieces of information are missing from your citations of a direct quote. A listing for Jones's article should be added to your references section. Meanwhile, a thorough edit is recommended to address writing convention errors. For example, there's a typo with the use of "pears" instead of "peers," and you have a tendency to write run-on sentences when using the word "however.""
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