An Argument Against the Opinion That Technology Makes Traditions Die Out
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"You have written an essay that is well-organized and presents information in a logical order. You have also chosen a number of good points to use to support your position. Consider elaborating on your essay by adding why people are worried about this issue in the first place. Why do people think it doesn't make sense to keep traditions alive? In what ways is technology playing a more significant role in people's lives? Despite the presentation of facts, there is a lack of citations in your paper. Make sure that any information that you obtained from another source is followed by a citation so that you avoid plagiarism issues. There are a number of significant grammar and sentence structure errors throughout the essay that affect the readability of the paper. These need to be resolved. Last, consider also elaborating on the conclusion. The conclusion is your opportunity to really "sell" your audience on your viewpoint. While summarizing the main points you made in the essay, also go into detail about why keeping tradition alive is so important. "
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