An Argument in Favor of Use of Animals in Medical Research
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"You have started your paper off with a strong introduction that includes background information and a thesis statement that guides the essay. You have also neatly formatted the essay, making it easier to read. You have done a good job using evidence to demonstrate both sides of the issue. Since there is so much evidence, it is concerning that there are no citations. Make sure that you cite any information that you gathered from another source to avoid plagiarism issues. Much of the body of your paper feels like you are just listing facts. Consider figuring out a way to present this information in a way that flows better. Last, your essay lacks a conclusion. The conclusion is the opportunity to summarize the main points you made in the body of the essay and reiterate the essay's goal. Including this allows the reader to finish the paper with a stronger understanding of the paper's message."
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