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"Overall, this is a very well-written paper, though there is also room for improvement. Your essay is well organized and well-formatted, which helps improve reading comprehension and the cohesiveness of the writing. To enhance the paper's organization, I suggest that you more clearly align the body of the paper with your thesis statement. While you list what you will talk about in the paper, it is not always clear how your paragraphs align with your list. Improved topic sentences can help with this! I also recommend that you use the conclusion as an opportunity to summarize the main points you made in the body of the paper and relate them to the thesis statement. Doing these two things will also make it more transparent what the purpose of your essay is and allow the reader to see that you stay focused on that purpose throughout your writing. Consider removing some of the unimportant detail about each different security threat group because your introduction does not imply that talking about them in-depth is the goal of the paper. If this is the actual goal of the paper, that should be made clear in your introduction. In general, you have a good handle on writing conventions, but a round of proofreading will catch the remaining errors scattered throughout."
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