An Overview of the Catholic Church During the Middle Ages
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"You have done a great job providing evidence that supports the topic of your essay. You have also neatly formatted it making it easier to read. As written, the essay does not have a clear introduction or conclusion. This leads to some confusion in the body of the essay. Include an introduction that is well-defined by creating a thesis statement and include a conclusion that is well-defined because it summarizes all the main points in the essay. The thought process used to transition from one topic to another is not always clear. Include transitional words and phrases when shifting from one idea to the next to create a relationship between the ideas. There are a number of punctuation, grammar, and sentence structure errors that need to be resolved. One of the most noticeable that consistently happens is not following an introductory phrase with a comma."
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