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Analysis of "Don't Ban Photos of Skinny Models" by Vanessa Friedman

In this analytical essay, a student considers the effectiveness of Vanessa Friedman's argument in the article "Don't Ban Photos of Skinny Models." The student asserts that Friedman makes a valid argument about how all body types should be respected.
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Angela's feedback:

"You pull meaningful quotes from the article and provide a lot of good reasoning for the different quotes you use; however, consider reorganizing your essay a bit by breaking up the first body paragraph and spreading its content across the subsequent body paragraphs as appropriate. As is, your work is somewhat repetitive since in the first body paragraph you summarize Friedman's main points using quotes and then sometimes reuse those same quotes to talk about each of the points at length in their own paragraphs. To give your work more polish, take some time to ensure that all your apostrophes and quotation marks are formatted in curly style instead of straight. At the moment, the essay has a mix of both. On the topic of quotation marks, remember that when you have quotes within quotes, standard practice is to alternate between double quotes for the first (outer) set and then single quotes for the second (inner) set."

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