Causes, Symptoms, and Treatments of Alzheimer's Disease
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"You have written a very informative essay that adequately educates the reader on the disease. You start the essay of with a strong introduction that guides the body of the essay which flows in a logical manner. You then end the essay with a conclusion that is a good summary of the main points in the paper. Although you have created a clear, guiding thesis statement, it got a little lost in your introduction. All of the information that you included after it should be in the body of the paper somewhere. There are minor formatting errors throughout the essay. These mostly appear as extra spaces between paragraphs and around headings. There are a significant number of grammar and sentence structure errors that need to be resolve in order for the essay to be easier to read. Although there are a lot of facts and citations already in the essay, there are some very detailed areas that seem to have very few to no citations in them. Make sure that you accurately cite all information that you got from other sources to avoid plagiarism issues. Last, there is an inconsistency about the information in the body of your paper that makes it challenging to read. When you get to the part of the essay that is about what causes the disease, the language you use is so technical that many readers would not be able to understand it. Consider presenting this information in a manner that it easier for most people to understand. "
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