A History of Chemical Reactions and Their Contribution to the Development of Chemistry
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"You have a lot of information to share about chemical reactions, so it would be helpful to the reader if you mentioned in your introduction all the main topics you plan to cover in the essay. Overall, you do a good job with your explanations, but your paragraphing choices need to be revisited. As is, the work is full of short paragraphs that make for a choppy flow. Combining various paragraphs on the same subject would make it easier for the reader to follow your reasoning and transitions into new topics. Indenting the first line of each paragraph by half an inch would also improve the work’s readability. Meanwhile, terms such as “seventeenth century” and “ancient” should not be capitalized, and editing is needed to fix errors such as the use of “lead” instead of “led.” In academic writing, citations are typically provided for direct quotes."
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