Comparing Our First Amendment Rights to the Rights of Those in George Orwell's "1984"

Jenn's feedback:

"Overall, your essay is well-written. It flows well and there are natural transitions between your paragraphs and sentences. It starts off with a basic introduction that leaves the reader wondering what obliteration of self means, so consider providing more context so that a reader is compelled to want to read more. Throughout your paragraphs, you include a lot of evidence to support your ideas, but there are not any citations. You need to cite any facts that are included in your paper so that plagiarism doesn't become an issue. Once you have created citations, then make sure that you create a reference page. Also, as a reader, I wonder why you only decided to write about freedom of speech and petition when all of the freedoms are mentioned in the introduction. Consider including a paragraph about all of them, or only mention the ones you are going to write about in the introduction. While your paper is neat, there is inconsistent spacing between your paragraphs that need to be resolved. You end your paper with a good conclusion, but it is a bit simple. Consider summarizing the key points that are in the body of the paper in the conclusion."

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